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1/24/2020 c12 6E-mov
Hi its been awhile but please update your story thanks.
9/30/2018 c12 Guest
Wow! It's been a while since I checked on Flame of Recca fanfics and I'm glad I did. Ugh, I'm a sucker for tofuu and I'm so thankful to know that you are committed to finish this. It's sad that some of the authors seems to just drop their stories. Anticipating the next chap.
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11/24/2017 c12 1Lord Mayhem
Hi UTZ,

Nice to see your work on FanFiction again. Love the curve the story is currently taking.

I noticed a few points though, that I thought you might be interested:

* A couple of places has redundancy
* Tenses seem to be off in a few places
* You missed 't' for the train station and it became rain station.

"...Marlboro on the crystal designed glass ashtray..." crystal is a material, so the word designed doesn't seem to fit here.

"...have checked in one those hotels..." checked-in to one of those

"...a message with one of those men." one of the men? I think that sound better.

"The surrounding was serene as the bird..." the word surrounding doesn't really make sense here.

"...Kirisawa stepped up her pace..." quickened her pace?

"Breaking the silence, was the crunching sound of the gravels..." The silence was broken with the crunching sound of the gravels?

I could go on, but I hope you got my point by now. The dialogue also feels more south Indian centric. If possible try to use general english.

As always, great work.

CZB
12/27/2015 c11 5G-Cleft
Hi! I've grabbed the opportunity to read your fic and I wasn't disappointed. (Also, I did it on purpose because you gave a great review for my story and I feel grateful). I like how the subtle indications of affection for Fuuko are springing up from the cold-blooded assasin, and I look forward to seeing more of what they can accomplish together to fulfill their personal goals. I'm actually wondering about what will happen in the later chapters - will she end up killing or will they both turn their backs from the path they have chosen? Whatever will happen, they're in it together so I am consoled with that truth. I like stories that make readers think, just like yours. :) You've mentioned that you're an aspiring writer and I can see a lot of potential. Choosing a plotline that embraces three genres - action, suspense, and romance- demands seriously good writing skills and you've got that.

By the way, I feel really honored that I had helped you or inspired you in your writing. It was a heartwarming comment. I learned a lot from the talented writers in this fandom, too. I wish you the best. You are brilliant!
12/1/2014 c11 Mina Xu
Please continue
1/12/2014 c11 hopelessromantic
please update because i'm starting to feel the excitement of the story.. i know that this story is going to be real nice.. i hope you don't give up on this..
7/26/2013 c11 1Lord Mayhem
Wow! Been nearly 2 months since you updated this chapter. And finally I got some time to go over all these.
Now onto the review!

I was thinking that your writing has improved very much until I hit halfway point of this chapter, from which I gathered that it was written and re-written with lots of frustration since your grammar as well as facts started going off tone.

First off, the term is backpack; not "back on her back". It makes no sense. Secondly the guy gives her his Galaxy note, which is a electronic device. How the "Top-Secret" mark on PAPER be visible? Kinda maddening for a digital copy, but acceptable I guess.

Next off is the line, "He has reaches to high place". Oh really :P Like "Uski pahunch upar tak hai?" XP Please do think of revision.

"Court of Law?" Really? :P I used that term to explain it to you...

FInally overall chapter rating; is good. As much as attention to detail is necessary, in some cases, like the place of furniture in the house is bit unnecessary. It may cause headaches to people who imagine it all the way and get buggered up by getting side-tracked to the story. And the last point is the interaction. It felt a tight knit, stoic method of describing conversations. Maybe a little more loose style may be tried out.

In total found about 8-12 grammatical mistakes including misplacement of quotes in one place.

P.S: The repeated Galaxy Note advertisement is making me believe that your father has finally bought one... XD
5/30/2013 c10 Lord Mayhem
Alrighty! I'm officially done with the 10 chapters... Phew... Took a while... Your language structuring was near flawless in this chapter. That in itself is a cause for celebration... XD

As far as story line is concerned, I fear a rehash may be inevitable, but on the other hand, I see a perfect position for rise of a new plotline... Will discuss once you are up, or if your phone charges up... :P
5/30/2013 c9 Lord Mayhem
I thought Hyuga is spelled with a single 'u' :P Anyways, I know the plot very well looks like... No thanks to Bobby... :P Found a few grammatical mistakes in this chapter though... You seriously need a Beta reader... :P
5/30/2013 c8 Lord Mayhem
Ah! Finally, your grammar seems to have improved though a little sentence arrangement and jumping of sentences may be ironed out a little more... Looks like this chapter is newer, as the style of writing is way different to the one's that were uploaded at the publishing of this fic.

Well Done! Onto the the next one then... :D
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