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3/19/2020 c1 2vrockpokey
Every time I read this title it always makes me think back to the volleyball scene in Top Gun. Helluva story though!
1/5/2020 c37 66Wandergirl108
Well damn you just killed three important old characters like they were nothing. Not sure why Jace killed the woman who raised him…I guess to make a point? Yikes. Quite a villain we've got…It's funny, I thought I'd be happy about any situation that might lead to Veger dying, but this was just cold. Wow.
1/5/2020 c34 Wandergirl108
So Rider had only ever seen lockpicking work in movies, but he still succeeded…? Okay then. XD
10/14/2019 c33 Guest
Wow and here I though I could not hate Jak more than I already do... I was wrong, I hate him a whole lot more! He is no better than Erol!

How dare he do that to a child and... ewwww! What if Camille and Rider were related and... EWWW EWWW EWWW!

I really hope that Jace is saved, its not his fault what happened... can Rider get through to him? I really hope so... Jace does not deserve to suffer and pay for his idiotic parents mistakes. (WHO PUTS A BABY IN JAIL?! Can Jak and Ashlin be punished for that? Pretty please?)
10/4/2019 c33 Wandergirl108
So wait why did Laney turn? And who does Rider have to save, if not Vidia? I DO love Rider's "fault" turning into its own special power, that's really cool. And I'm glad Camille is finally in jail, though I'm still not sure why that didn't happen sooner…I look forward to the family drama and how we're going to take Jace down. Good to see you again, Paradise! :D
7/9/2019 c31 Wandergirl108
Oh wow…Jace is Ashlein and Jak’s son? That explains everything except how Rayn knew about him…but, quick question: how? Jak and Ashlein kissed once at the end of Jak 3, and by Jak X, which happened like not even a year later, Torn and Ashlein were very much together, as were Jak and Keira, so…

In any case, this is quite a roller coaster, so many sudden twists and close calls! Can’t wait to see where you take it all next!
7/8/2019 c26 Wandergirl108
Woohoo, glad to finally have more! I admit I don’t really remember a lot of stuff referenced here…When was there a wedding? Who is Faye, again? And I wasn’t expecting the trip through the catacombs to be yada-yadad over, so jumping in on things like this was a little jarring. But, good to see more of Vidia, and the growing implications that Camille is working with Jace has me on edge. Good show!
1/15/2019 c25 Wandergirl108
Aaaah, I thought this story was a lot closer to being done! PLEASE continue, this is going to torment me! I’m glad Jace is finally getting into the picture as a villain (I nearly forgot him during all the Pack and Camille stuff), but where is this headed?! I want to see!

Also I don’t really like that Laney’s such a badass. Wren, yes, but Light Eco isn’t for fighting. I thought Laney was the kind, mild-mannered one. Like, imagine Keira getting in a fight, that’s just not like her. And making them both be such badasses and then they lose anyway…I don’t know. It was cool, I guess, but…eh, it just didn’t quite sit right with me.

Also also, KASTER SAID WREN NOT LANEY! Ugh…details like that, writers can’t afford to get wrong, you have to pick one and stick to it or it just doesn’t feel right. If you meant Laney from the get-go, please go back and fix it, for the sake of any and all future readers.

Anyway, despite the odd bit here and there, this fic is spectacular, and I cannot wait for more! I probably shouldn’t have come back to it so soon, but it planted its roots in my mind and I couldn’t stop thinking about it. Very well done!
1/15/2019 c24 Wandergirl108
Once again, Kaster insisted it was Wren he wanted. I can’t quite let that go. As for the rest…I can’t wait to see where it’s headed!
1/15/2019 c23 Wandergirl108
Powerful. I’m getting uneasy as the chapters are running out…
1/15/2019 c22 Wandergirl108
Again, why is Camille being allowed to get away with all of this? Jak could stop her, her parents could stop her, there’s no reason for her to have this kind of power. She’s not the most powerful person in Haven City, she’s not even the most influential, and everyone with more power than her has front-row seats to her viciousness. I kind of feel like this is falling apart…
1/15/2019 c19 Wandergirl108
I thought Kaster said he was into Wren, not Laney - he got all mad when Rider suggested it was Laney. And somehow I feel like Wren suits him better. Ah well…
1/15/2019 c18 Wandergirl108
I’m intrigued by your idea of Eco. It’s not the way I thought of it, but…it’s intriguing. But what could taint Eco? Dark Eco…or Rider?
1/15/2019 c17 Wandergirl108
You could have made this a bit clearer, the way some things were phrased was confusing and a few things (like the poison water and the bombing) felt kind of rushed. Rider’s place, in particular, is unclear here. But, it’s still as engaging as ever!
1/15/2019 c16 Wandergirl108
Who was Jak talking to, Erol? And…and this reminds me of a huge problem with this fic: how can the Mar family exist if Jak didn’t stay in the past and have kids there? I don’t know, I take issue with a lot of this chapter, nice as it was to get a peek into Jak’s mind…
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