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9/19/2015 c1 2rockmanrocks
An interesting take on Guile's thoughts when he climbs the bluffs! Turns out that he loves the challenge. Now, his confidence makes sense. :)
9/14/2015 c1 68Legendary Biologist
I'm supposed to judge this on Saturday when everything has been submitted, but afraid that I can't make it on one day, I'll start judging from now. Here goes, Impy!

Talk about style. This is a very stylish drabble. It's simply amazing that you can give cadence to the whole piece through the syllables and stress/iambic. It isn't a poem of course, but the rhythm just makes it read poetically. More like a rap I must say. For example, the line about heartbeat and breathing rate. Wonderful work there.

Another stylistic thing I love here is the symbolism of cyclical things. Guile tries to climb the bluffs, but the falling rocks stimulate him. When he has done dodging a volley of boulders, he wishes for more. And it repeats again, again, and again. In your narrative, you end it with the first line, giving this piece overall a cyclical feel. Fantastic.

As for the plot, I think the difference between death seeker and challenge seeker is nicely done here. Guile wishes for more falling boulders because he likes the risk, not because he wants to die (as shown by him maneuvering through the boulders). As for the character, the portrayal of Spike Spieguile...er, challenge seeker Guile is just well done. He likes dodging those boulders, but he only wishes for more just for fun. To sum it up, Guile always feels that risk amuses instead of terrifies. He just loves some fun and challenge in his life.

Impressive work, Impy! Thanks for joining the contest!

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