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11/5/2015 c1 3Lexik
Hehe, Lire was my first main~

The first thing that caught my eye was... well, the first sentence. ;) It seems like "lip" ought to be plural instead. Aside from that, a small smile suits Lire a lot. :) I remember her personality and expressions always being really reserved, and that's a nice way to introduce her.

Yep, a high leap over a crowd while wearing a skirt like that is not advised, lol.

The mention of "'accidental' shoulder bumps" has me thinking a good deal of these people don't take too kindly to her.

Lire's emotions are very richly portrayed, but part of me fumbled when she showed such an anxious reaction to the lady's stories. A sense of deja vu for what? I do remember plenty of troll and gorgos encounters offhand, but none so poignant that I can fish out a clear reason for her to despair like that. Although, you did highlight that she's the only one left... Hm. I'm not sure if that's quite the effect you were looking for, but either way, I definitely want to know what happened :3

She's going to walk right into the source of those rumors, isn't she? ;)

Oh, and it was a neat little touch how she sensed the flower.

Liking your Lire lots~ :)

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