7/13/2017 c1 Fango
Wow man, you really made me feel things reading it. I would love to see how the story continues, hope you resume it. And thanks for the great lecture. Good luck in the life!
Wow man, you really made me feel things reading it. I would love to see how the story continues, hope you resume it. And thanks for the great lecture. Good luck in the life!
3/9/2016 c1 Guest
what hapend keep going
what hapend keep going
10/5/2015 c1 Guest
Interesting story. I feel that you are trying to capture the feel of the Scott Pilgrim series within written text. I like that. Your character seems to blend in with the Scott Pilgrim series yet he doesn't. But then again, this is a fan fic so exceptions.
I also feel that the fight between Scott and Tyson was random. Were they drunk? If that's the case then ignore my comment. Just be sure to add if they are drunk or not, otherwise, you might confuse readers.
All in all, I think you got a good start. Some improvements with some sections that I'm sure you can spot but I know you'll get there.
Interesting story. I feel that you are trying to capture the feel of the Scott Pilgrim series within written text. I like that. Your character seems to blend in with the Scott Pilgrim series yet he doesn't. But then again, this is a fan fic so exceptions.
I also feel that the fight between Scott and Tyson was random. Were they drunk? If that's the case then ignore my comment. Just be sure to add if they are drunk or not, otherwise, you might confuse readers.
All in all, I think you got a good start. Some improvements with some sections that I'm sure you can spot but I know you'll get there.