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for Poison of an ally, love of a Bene Gesserit

3/18/2017 c1 1Alan Scott
I like it! Definitely a great (and believable) explanation for this huge, Universe changing question.

For credibility you'll want to fix a couple of things:

Thufur Hawat, not Hyatt.

Atreides, not Atradies.
2/20/2017 c1 25Glenstorm63
This piece was so very skillfully written. I enjoyed ir immensely. Nice to get Jessica's internal #ruminations on it all. I hope you write a liitle more on her final decision about having a boy and how she justifies it to herself. Something to be careful of is name spelling... Atradies (Atreides) and Thufir Hyatt (Hawatt) and the reference to the cousin is a statement of belonging and requires an apostrophe of ownership e.g. Atreides', at one point. Best wishes to you.
10/2/2016 c1 108Scififan33
Nice idea

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