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5/26 c7 68Fox the Writer
Good to see ol' Romac here. He's certainly an underrated character in need of his own time in the spotlight - his thoughts were very interesting to read about regarding his feelings for Mira and his career. Well done! And I'm looking forward to seeing Evil!Buzz and the meeting between Ozma and Ty!
5/25 c6 Fox the Writer
Seeing Ozma's thoughts about her job and Buzz was very nice to see, and that added touch of her and her interaction with Rocket definitely is an interesting bonus too. I like how you give her a lot of depth to her persona that we see on the show - it makes her stand out all the more I think. Well done!

Also, I can't wait to see Romac's entry, and I'm eager to see your new story as well!
5/24 c5 Fox the Writer
Fop’s a great character and the way you wrote his thought process as he learns about the galaxy outside Tangea is wonderful! It’s cool to see him rethink some things about his life and his choice to remain in Star Command. This made him more of a likeabls character for sure! Well done!
5/24 c4 Fox the Writer
Nice job on bringing ol' Wild Bill into the mix! He seems like a great character into the mix and it's cool to see someone giving him a place in the galaxy as an instructor at the Space Ranger Academy! Well done indeed.
5/24 c4 32Ranger-Nova
Oh, nice to see an update on this fic! This was a fun little look at Wild Bill. Keep up the good work! :D
9/22/2014 c3 68Fox the Writer
Oohh... a POV for Savy? Niiice! We need more Savy stories! :D

But seriously, this is a nice piece you did for our Slayer. I love how you portrayed her tough-as-nails attitude and how she's gradually starting to accept that the universe is more than what it seems. I also love the fact that you described the Ranger Scouts to be more than a group that sells cookies; I was a Girl Scout myself and even I learned other things asides from selling cookies. XD

Now there's not too much I can really comment on here, other than I'd like to see Savy's reactions and thoughts about her parents being brought back to life-I'm sure that she'd have a lot of happy things to say since the two robots who took her under their wings were brought back and she's just glad they're not shut down anymore. *laughs*

Other than that, great job with Savy! Keep up the writing! :)

-Fox
9/22/2014 c2 Fox the Writer
*laughs* Well, it's wonderful to see Warp's POV about his position with Zurg. And it's really great that you wrote it from his own eyes on how he sees everything-the good, the bad and the ugly. I especially loved the bit where we hear on what his thoughts are on the other Rangers he went to the Academy with, like Rocket and Ty. That's a good touch to add onto him and it makes him more human in that we see tidbits of his relationships with other characters asides from Zurg and Buzz. After all, one can't only have one or two relationships with other people, now can they? XD

But if there's something I'd like to see in this chapter, it's Warp's thoughts on aging rapidly when Natron took his youth away. I feel that if you placed that in the chapter, it'd give more for Warp to think about, since he did suffer a lot in that episode. And he saved Buzz's life after he regained his youth, so that kind of thing, I feel, deserves to be looked at. :)

All in all, though, you did a good job getting through Warp's eyes and how he sees everything-thus making him a complex charrie. Well done! :)
2/25/2014 c1 Fox the Writer
Hmm...

Well, as a Ty fan myself, I say you're definitely on the right track with writing for Ty! I see a lot of potential for Ty's thoughts to shine through the events of Pre-"Wirewolf" and "RotM", with his being at the Academy and joining up Buzz, Warp and Rocket! I did love the ending of this piece, when Nebula edited Ty's file to fit Ty's character. That warmed my heart. (:

However... there are things in this piece I would strongly advise you to alter a bit to help this piece really stand out. As I've read in the summary for this piece, this is the start of an introspective collection of drabbles, and that the objective is to see how the charries seem themselves. I do like that, BUT... I kind of feel that's lacking here.

This piece seems more to be of a summary about everything that happened versus seeing how Ty truly sees himself. That's kind of what I want to know more about: Does he see himself as weak or strong? Brave or cowardly? I do see the tidbits of Ty's thoughts as he goes about his missions, like Canis Lunis, and I do like that, but I feel that by adding his own thoughts on how he sees things, how he sees the world around him and himself, it'll help improve the piece.

Overall, you're off to a good start! The thoughts of Ty's are, I feel, coming along in the right direction. But with a few more edits to add to his eyes, what you feel and think he sees in the world around him, you'll be on your way. Keep at it, and keep the faith in your writing! (:

-Fox

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