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11/1/2020 c14 Gibson1014
Hah! Show that rotten salesman what he gets for being a scummy person and getting people killed!
11/1/2020 c13 Gibson1014
Josey the flying rabbit! Great edition to the family!
11/1/2020 c12 Gibson1014
It’s so awesome to know what’s on the island that they bought!
11/1/2020 c9 Gibson1014
Get’em Sophie! Show’em who’s boss!
11/1/2020 c6 Gibson1014
If only their were actual places like this place then maybe the world would not be as black and white like it is.
11/1/2020 c5 Gibson1014
What an awesome type of society to live in!

It’s awesome that they are treating them this well after what they did!
11/1/2020 c4 Gibson1014
So that’s where Peter came from! Ok that makes sense now
11/1/2020 c3 Gibson1014
Poor young Kyle! Being alone at such a young age
11/1/2020 c1 Gibson1014
Was just about to read the third fic in the trilogy then I seen this one! Glad I caught this!
5/2/2020 c22 3PyroFox117
So your author avatar fell face-first in alien horse cleavage. Never have a read such a relatable sentence in fiction. Really, though, that was pretty funny. Not quite as funny but still heartwarming was your portrayal of Celtic culture. I know almost nothing about it, but it's still awesome that you're trying to present it in a cool yet respectable way.

OK, at this point they really should just eat Josie. "Great Eramore Garden War," huh? I wonder if that'll come up later. Reminds me of Winnie the Pooh, somehow.

Anyway, this was a fantastic story front-to-back, and I eagerly await whatever you do next.
5/2/2020 c22 2Kaijucifer
Hahaha, what a way to come back and end the chapter! Glad to see you back! Love your stories, especially these ones! Eagerly await the next chapter!
Also. Glad to hear your mom is doing better! Seems both our moms' numbers aren't up yet! So let's cherish them while they're still with us!
5/1/2020 c19 3PyroFox117
With luck, I should be finished with your fic tomorrow. I mean, I could finish today, but I'm lazy :1

That "We need a weapon" line from Chapter 16 reminded me of Master Chief's "I need a weapon" from Halo 2. Not sure if that's what you're going for, but it made me smile... as did the fact Looney Tunes is still around in the 29th Century. And the Superman theme?! Mind blowing.

Something I wondered about were the interspecies pairings themselves. There's quite a few now - Leon and Shiloh, Russ and Telena and Hank and Niju, plus Seth and Selene, who come later. I can't help but notice that all these pairing are Male Human X Female Aliens. Nothing wrong with that at all - it's more my interest, too - but it seems kind of weird that we haven't seen the inverse in a society where it seems to be pretty accepted. Not a complaint, just an observation.

Finally, the fact that Kyle and Sophie are moving more and more towards being "one mind". That'd freak me out if it happened to me; where would I end and the other person begin? Kyle seems pretty happy with it now, but it might be cool if he has to struggle with it. Which memories are his and which are Sophie's? Will they start blending together? I hope to try something like that at some point in my fic to give it a more horror-is edge.
4/30/2020 c16 PyroFox117
Three more chapters done, and I enjoyed these as always.

Kyle and Sophie interacting is nice - shouldn't even have to say that. I'm glad their house is decorated and everything, and Sophie's "redesign" of their bedroom is awesome. Don't think I could sleep in such a room, though! Sophie's new pet is also neat and serves to contrast the obvious predator with her softer side.

Oh, and my strong guess is that you're Alex. Sounds about right :)

Something rather silly that I nevertheless found annoying was how other invasive species are treated. The Serrex were vilified while the flying genetically-modified rabbit and strawberries and who knows what else are completely fine. They're not wrecking the ecosystem now, but they could eventually. Kinda makes them look like hypocrites.

And it's interesting that you're now incorporating Alien lore proper into the story now... even the ones that people would rather forget about. I mean, I'm not a fan, but I hear the "Ellen gets cloned in the future" movie is really bad. Can't make a judgement on that myself, but props for going all-in on this. Makes me wonder whatever happened to the clone.
4/29/2020 c13 PyroFox117
More thoughts here for Chapters 10 - 12 and the Interlude.

It's nice that Kyle and Sophie were able to get their money back, but I hope they give it to a charitable cause, considering how benevolent they've been so far. They're millionaires, and I'm not sure what else they'd need to spend money on. Seems like they've found their happily-ever-after in paradise... though that can't be true, considering there's more story!

I was impressed by the Serrex extermination and how Sophie and Kyle disagreed about it. They're an invasive species and they hurt Kyle, so it makes sense Sophie wants them all dead, but I think she went too far. I think a good compromise would be to kill them all except one - it couldn't restart the population, and the ecosystem would be able to support a single one for the rest of its life.

Something I think could've been handled better was just how lucky they seem to be. Like, this island has ancient ruins, multiple species thought endangered or extinct, beauty beyond compare and livability that puts the Swiss Family Robinson to shame. I understand you're trying to make Eramore its own place, but I feel like spacing these discoveries out would have been more impactful. Just my thoughts, though, and it really is a neat setting. The storm scene was cool, though maybe Kyle should have packed a PlayStation or something - two weeks of staying inside is no fun, as we all know now.

Oh, and finally, tell your mother I absolutely LOVED the Interlude. I wasn't sure what it talked about the whole time, but the language was beautiful and getting to explore more of the native culture made me smile. You have a wonderful son, and I'm so happy your condition has improved!
4/28/2020 c9 PyroFox117
That scene at the beginning of Chapter 8 threw me off, but of course it was something innocent. Probably good for Kyle. I mean, Xenomorph blood is acidic, so who knows about their... other fluids. I like the Milurian language you created. I don't know if any of the words are based on a real dialect, but it seems like something that could exist.

I checked the map for the island, which helped me out a lot. Reminds me of the island from Lord of the Flies with all the weird stuff on it, I have to say.

Finally, the scene at the end of Chapter 9 was great. This is the kind of conflict I wanted. We see that Sophie's choice is morally ambiguous, but it makes sense why she killed all those animals, even the babies - they hurt Kyle. I'm excited to see how he, animal lover that he is, reacts to that. That's a fantastic opportunity for conflict!
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