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10/6/2015 c1 bash
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7/27/2014 c1 InsertWittyName
Is this still going to be updated? It would be awesome if it is. :(
Pretty please, with whatever you want on top?
2/16/2014 c1 Me
aaahhhh Brave Engie! The cowardly lion stepping up and being the brave lil lion we all know he is! :3
1/27/2014 c1 14Skullmaskvulture
Wonderful story, I've been waiting for one like this in a loooong time. I imagine the owner of the toys much like one of the librarian mutants from Metro 2033. (look them up if you are unfamiliar with the game) But not knowing what it looks like for now adds a nice chill to the creepy atmosphere. Love it.

I also have some critique:
- Snippy stabbed his eye with a broken crowbar and is lying on the ground screaming. Why does nobody give him first aid or at least look if he's gonna be alright?
- How did Engie accidentally crash his head into the heavy steel door when he was just trying to push it open with his whole body? In my opinion that's highly impossible.
- Where was Pilot when Snippy got attacked? If he was outside, why didn't he help fend off the mutant?
- What did Engie trip over at the end, did his feet get caught up in wire or were his shoe laces open, it would definitely be a plus if you would tell us how it happened. :)

Looking forward to the next chapter!
1/23/2014 c1 veryanonnymous
I want to know what will happen! :D
1/18/2014 c1 10GelibeanH20
"I"ll save you, Snippy!"

TRIP

FALL

"I'm sooooo gonna die."

Awesome so far, keep up the work!

One thought: maybe you could start a new paragraph whenever a new person is talking? It makes easier reading. :D
1/12/2014 c1 13sodapoppana
Very nice! I like how the two just steps over the suffering Snippy and I really like Engie. I hope you'll update soon!

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