6/25/2014 c10 18Morris Kenyon
Good ending. What a stubborn pair they were, but they would never have worked as a team. Sword and Sorcery is no longer my genre now but I really enjoyed this story and thought it was well written and exciting.
Good ending. What a stubborn pair they were, but they would never have worked as a team. Sword and Sorcery is no longer my genre now but I really enjoyed this story and thought it was well written and exciting.
6/25/2014 c9 Morris Kenyon
Bar is a right charmer isn't he? A real babe-magnet. Not. Again, tense and exciting and you ramp up expectations and I like the phrase 'insolent slowness'.
Bar is a right charmer isn't he? A real babe-magnet. Not. Again, tense and exciting and you ramp up expectations and I like the phrase 'insolent slowness'.
6/25/2014 c8 Morris Kenyon
Great fight scene - I could imagine every blow and parry, and you got across their exhaustion and also their indomitable characters. Very well written and exciting.
Great fight scene - I could imagine every blow and parry, and you got across their exhaustion and also their indomitable characters. Very well written and exciting.
6/25/2014 c5 Morris Kenyon
Not the most subtle proposal of marriage of all time. Wine? Romantic Music? Dinner? Chocolates? Flowers? (Not even from the local BP filling station)
Nah - just come out with it.
Seriously, your use of dialogue is excellent, especially bringing out Sonja's past.
Not the most subtle proposal of marriage of all time. Wine? Romantic Music? Dinner? Chocolates? Flowers? (Not even from the local BP filling station)
Nah - just come out with it.
Seriously, your use of dialogue is excellent, especially bringing out Sonja's past.
6/23/2014 c4 Morris Kenyon
I've read the first few chapters and will carry on with this exciting and well written story. It reminds me of the days I spent reading Conan etc under the desk at school. There is plenty of action, excitement and good use of dialogue. It doesn't drag or get boring. There's nothing to improve - this is an excellent example of the 'Sword & Sandals' genre. Keep up your writing.
I've read the first few chapters and will carry on with this exciting and well written story. It reminds me of the days I spent reading Conan etc under the desk at school. There is plenty of action, excitement and good use of dialogue. It doesn't drag or get boring. There's nothing to improve - this is an excellent example of the 'Sword & Sandals' genre. Keep up your writing.
5/10/2014 c10 Ajax
Fantastic read. That was a very superb rendition of a credible foe for Sonja, and the back and forth between their psychologies was very well counterpointed with the action. The ending was poignant for Sonja's feelings here. Well done.
Fantastic read. That was a very superb rendition of a credible foe for Sonja, and the back and forth between their psychologies was very well counterpointed with the action. The ending was poignant for Sonja's feelings here. Well done.