6/3/2015 c1 31alice writes stuff
Alright, I'm going to be honest. This is a nice story, I do like the concept. The only thing I would say is that you could've maybe cut down on the amount of OCs in the story- particularly the royal ones. It got a little confusing after a while. Other than that, I thought it was a good story. I'd recommend getting a friend to check it over, though, as there were a few issues with spelling and grammar. Honestly, I think that if you got a good beta and cut down on the OCs a little, this would be quite a good story.
Alright, I'm going to be honest. This is a nice story, I do like the concept. The only thing I would say is that you could've maybe cut down on the amount of OCs in the story- particularly the royal ones. It got a little confusing after a while. Other than that, I thought it was a good story. I'd recommend getting a friend to check it over, though, as there were a few issues with spelling and grammar. Honestly, I think that if you got a good beta and cut down on the OCs a little, this would be quite a good story.