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8/8/2016 c1 Guest
Wow this is very interesting so far!
12/18/2015 c2 8Light Hero Kaiser
ok can't wait for more
6/7/2015 c1 Existiert Nicht
Just like Darth below me said, put some work into the grammar/spelling and you've got the start of a great story. I'll be looking forward to more. if you need help, just ask. :)
8/19/2014 c1 1Darth Mittens42
I know the feeling of wanting to get this stuff out into the world. You have the ideas on rapid-fire, and I think this has potential.
Spelling, capitalization, and proper spacing are going to be your friends here. Take the time and edit this properly so that nothing gets passed over.
Once you've got that down, give us the juicy details! Throw in some set dressing, background details, anything to break up the back-to-back dialogue, or separate each speaker with something more distinct than what you've got.
Most importantly, don't stop. Keep writing. I'm guilty of not doing that, and I really regret not coming back sooner. Just keep doing what you're doing, and try to get better each time. I'd love to know a little more about each of these characters, and I'm sure that will come in its own time. Keep it up, any new stories for this fandom are good.

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