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12/14/2018 c4 27The Viscount Vampyre
Sorry mate, but I got as far as I could read.
The story suffers unduly for your syntax and grammatical errors.
You've got a lot of potential here but it's marred and bogged down. Editing and some proof reading would do your work wonders.
I'd very strongly recommend it.
VV
Sorry mate, but I got as far as I could read.
The story suffers unduly for your syntax and grammatical errors.
You've got a lot of potential here but it's marred and bogged down. Editing and some proof reading would do your work wonders.
I'd very strongly recommend it.
VV
12/14/2018 c3 The Viscount Vampyre
Oh... the paragraphs. They're a little dense to say the least.
Once again editing and proof reading is needed.
VV
Oh... the paragraphs. They're a little dense to say the least.
Once again editing and proof reading is needed.
VV
12/14/2018 c2 The Viscount Vampyre
There's some issues with your syntax, nothing too major just some editing and proof-reading needed. But I have noticed your use of hanged. You should be using hung. There are a few others but for the most part, like I said nothing too major.
VV
There's some issues with your syntax, nothing too major just some editing and proof-reading needed. But I have noticed your use of hanged. You should be using hung. There are a few others but for the most part, like I said nothing too major.
VV
11/23/2016 c4 2stormdragon981
Can you please keep relationships out of the story, otherwise great story so far.
Can you please keep relationships out of the story, otherwise great story so far.
11/21/2016 c4 3reddevil47
Great chapter glad you updated, love that you wrote about the past as I was always interested in Amita and Sabals back story but man, what a firecracker she is! That's probably what I like best about her
Great chapter glad you updated, love that you wrote about the past as I was always interested in Amita and Sabals back story but man, what a firecracker she is! That's probably what I like best about her
11/22/2015 c2 3reddevil47
Interesting story, always thought the romance was missing a bit from far cry 4, can't wait to see what you do
Interesting story, always thought the romance was missing a bit from far cry 4, can't wait to see what you do
7/5/2015 c2 FaithConnors
I really really like it so far, ur writing style is very good. plS MAKE SABAL/AJAY BC THIS FANDOM NEEDS MORE OF THAT
I really really like it so far, ur writing style is very good. plS MAKE SABAL/AJAY BC THIS FANDOM NEEDS MORE OF THAT
3/22/2015 c2 joe etheridge
And I'm here to say I'm pretty much awesome in every way.I love your story I read em every day but is long enough put it that way I really like your writing can you do some more if you updated to at least four.
And I'm here to say I'm pretty much awesome in every way.I love your story I read em every day but is long enough put it that way I really like your writing can you do some more if you updated to at least four.
1/15/2015 c1 1BlackPsych
Awesome start! This background info about Sabal and Amita, canon or not, set the mood and made for a great exposition. Hopefully you do keep adding certain twists to the story with Ajay, and actually give him some characterization haha.
Awesome start! This background info about Sabal and Amita, canon or not, set the mood and made for a great exposition. Hopefully you do keep adding certain twists to the story with Ajay, and actually give him some characterization haha.
1/9/2015 c1 WrenBluebell
Great start :D i cant wait to see where it goes from here.. but you really set the stage good xxx nice way with words and character descriptions too.
Great start :D i cant wait to see where it goes from here.. but you really set the stage good xxx nice way with words and character descriptions too.