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12/14/2018 c4 27The Viscount Vampyre
Sorry mate, but I got as far as I could read.
The story suffers unduly for your syntax and grammatical errors.
You've got a lot of potential here but it's marred and bogged down. Editing and some proof reading would do your work wonders.
I'd very strongly recommend it.
VV
12/14/2018 c3 The Viscount Vampyre
Oh... the paragraphs. They're a little dense to say the least.
Once again editing and proof reading is needed.
VV
12/14/2018 c2 The Viscount Vampyre
There's some issues with your syntax, nothing too major just some editing and proof-reading needed. But I have noticed your use of hanged. You should be using hung. There are a few others but for the most part, like I said nothing too major.
VV
11/23/2016 c4 2stormdragon981
Can you please keep relationships out of the story, otherwise great story so far.
11/21/2016 c4 3reddevil47
Great chapter glad you updated, love that you wrote about the past as I was always interested in Amita and Sabals back story but man, what a firecracker she is! That's probably what I like best about her
9/21/2016 c3 22Slytherin Studios
nicely done, please update soon.
6/12/2016 c3 Guest
Hey its june now, but will you continue it ?
11/22/2015 c2 3reddevil47
Interesting story, always thought the romance was missing a bit from far cry 4, can't wait to see what you do
7/5/2015 c2 FaithConnors
I really really like it so far, ur writing style is very good. plS MAKE SABAL/AJAY BC THIS FANDOM NEEDS MORE OF THAT
3/22/2015 c2 joe etheridge
And I'm here to say I'm pretty much awesome in every way.I love your story I read em every day but is long enough put it that way I really like your writing can you do some more if you updated to at least four.
1/15/2015 c1 1BlackPsych
Awesome start! This background info about Sabal and Amita, canon or not, set the mood and made for a great exposition. Hopefully you do keep adding certain twists to the story with Ajay, and actually give him some characterization haha.
1/9/2015 c1 WrenBluebell
Great start :D i cant wait to see where it goes from here.. but you really set the stage good xxx nice way with words and character descriptions too.

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