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4/24/2016 c1 110ZabuzasGirl
Wonderful!
Update immediately, please.
2/27/2016 c3 4UnknownReaderHasJoined
That wasnt really well put together. But im interested in the Guardian of the galaxy cross over. Love it.
5/12/2015 c4 10princessyuki08
I like the story so far. It's good. Not too fond of the casting choice for Annabeth, but the plot is good.
5/9/2015 c6 leonorarese
Ugh, this story is so good! And your writing is amazing! Please update!
5/3/2015 c6 5LoneErebor
AHHHHHHH! I LOVE THIS STORY! Update? Pweese? :) Oh... and YEAH, if you've just seen the movie... yeah. That would have made me stop writing too. I just saw it last night, and DANG. The FEELS from the movie!
5/2/2015 c1 2blackjacksdonuts
Well I just started it, and let me say, THAT'S WHAT I'VE BEEN LOOKING FOR! All I wanted was a fanfic where there was an OC and the twins were Avengers and stuff you know, but noooo... Oh I'm so glad I found this, please keep going! Also, if you know a fanfic like that with Quicksilver in it, please tell me!
4/28/2015 c6 15TheLokiExperience
So I have read your story and while I enjoy some elements of it, including that of Annabeth's personality, there are some parts that I am finding hard to get past. I am a Marvel lover and understand how you want to draw together so many elements and characters, however, in some cases at this point in time in the MCU, it is unlikely. I do like this story, but I feel it still needs a lot of work and improvement to become an amazing story.

Your grammar is pretty good, with the exception of some convoluted sentences, but you need to improve on the tense you are writing in. It flicks from third person present tense to third person past tense, or even first person sometimes. This is something that can be achieved through proof reading your chapters, or obtaining a Beta reader. I also feel you need to clarify who is speaking, as it is sometimes confusing.

Her ability to take down so many guards, and have exceptional fighting skills is unlikely unless she has a mutation that allows that. Characters such as Tash and Clint have gone through years of training to achieve their level of fighting skills. And there is absolutely no way she would beat Black Widow in a sparring match without said mutation. Tash is considered to be one of the best, if not the best, at what she does.
You need to keep with one universe. Yes they are all connected, but having Avengers linked to Guardians of the Galaxy in the manner you have done so is highly unlikely.
Scarlett Witch would be able to defend herself from someone holding a gun to her head, as she has telekinesis as well as mental manipulation. This would allow her to get herself out of sticky situations.

It is also unlikely that civilians would not be running and screaming if there was a fight between people in a café. They would not hang around and wait for the person doing the fighting/rescuing to check if they were okay.

When she’s taken to SHIELD they would also have covered her gunshot wound and had it seen to, they aren’t savages. This means she wouldn’t get to the point where she’d need immediate medical attention. They also probably wouldn’t bother cuffing her, unless they thought she was good enough to take them all on. But come on, Fury is arrogant enough to believe that she isn’t. She also wouldn’t get cuffed to the bed; she’d just have someone monitoring her. I also highly doubt she would be reprimanded in such a manner for saving someone, especially Pietro and Wanda.
I do like her relationship with Clint, I find it quite cute as I believe he would be very good with is children. Your characterization of some of the main characters is done quite well.

Bucky is unlikely to be running around trying to obtain information from her as he is currently confused about his own identity. He would be suffering severe PTSD as well as having his memories coming back after years and years of EST (Electro Shock Therapy). Also, I think you need to be clearer in establishing when the story is set, as Bucky is no longer working for HYDRA during the course of Avengers.
I also doubt she has the orb containing the infinity stone, as the Guardians themselves ensured it went somewhere safe and contained. Also, I do not think Bucky would be concerned with the infinity stones at this point in time, if any point in time, as he has too many personal issues to deal with. Also, infinity stones, unless they’re a part of someone, could not actively cause changes to said person. HYDRA also probably wouldn’t concern themselves with this at this point in time as they, as well as SHIELD, are dealing with some major issues.

Please note I intended this review to be a constructive one and apologise in advance if I have come across in a hostile manner. Happy writing :)
3/26/2015 c1 7FinalFantasyCrazedGirl01
This is a good story. My only complaint is that you seem to switch perspectives a lot (which makes the story confusing) and are always mixing up who's saying what (also confusing). Just thought you should know that it makes your story harder to read.
3/24/2015 c5 TheRealTayler13
Plz update soon can't wait to read more
3/11/2015 c5 Superwholock'dFan
Woo! You've earned that pat on the back! I like how you've already dived into the plot. Most stories are still in the exposition stage by chapter 5. Also, I don't mean to be negative, but one thing I have noticed (in all your stories) is that when a conversation is going on, you write the other person's reaction to what is being said immediately after, which can make it confusing as to who is saying what. Otherwise, keep up the good work! :)
3/10/2015 c5 1Currahee506
White she's scared
3/8/2015 c4 BlackHawk98
Omg I love your story
3/6/2015 c4 Superwholock'dFan
This is getting good! Can't wait for the next chapter!
2/22/2015 c3 Superwholock'dFan
Well, things are certainly getting interesting! That last bit could be interpreted many ways. Do they want to experiment on her too, or does SHE have an infinity stone? Can't wait to see the next chapter!
1/26/2015 c2 Superwholock'dFan
Wow! Things are getting interesting so far! Can't wait for the "family reunion"!
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