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6h c8 3Medic 27
Great chapter! I really like how this one turned out! All the scenes were enjoyable.

Nick's campaign seems to be going smoothly. The Marshlands was a fun local to read about! seems like Nick is a rockstar there xD. The couple was adorable, and I really like that you included it. I think it added some depth to your world and made it apparent that Nick and Judy could affect the world around them, which is an important aspect of any longstanding work of fiction. As for winning over the Meadowlands, I wonder if he could do something like Mayor Lionheart did to get their support, albeit a little more sincerely.

The Bat's scene was nice as well. I am really enjoying the character growth that is happening, and the babies are adorable. I'm interested to see how the war plays out.

*slowclap for Harlan* He is following right in Judy's impulsive shadow, not waiting for direction. I think Mary and him will make a great team once they tune in to the same frequency. What just happened might be enough to pull the wax out of his ears. They really are two completely separate characters, in background, attitude, personality, approach to life, and almost every other descriptor. About the only thing that they share is their desire to make the world a better place (for lack of a better phrase).
9h c8 1Spelter
Uff, Harlan is in real trouble. The background with Tusk is bad, as if police could just do anything against minorities and get away with it. That is not what police officers should be able to.
Nick's win in the swamps could give him some slack in the elections, so I cross my fingers he can do it.
Lucy and Vlads poisoning are in no way possible, that would be just a bad way to go, Mr. Big is in no position to pull that off properly.

I love the jumps between the side stories as always. Can't wait for chapter 9 next month
8/2 c8 Wildefox25
Ayy! Nicks campaign getting back on track. I love you're descriptions of new districts and environments. I haven't seen the marshland written about much, so good on ya!
The war rages on, and I'm still siding with house Fangpyre!
I always love more flashbacks of Lucy's background. And character development! Whoop!
Harlan and Mary got some tension, geeze. Looking forward to seeing how that pans out. As well as Clovestone's shady business.
I wonder which character's gonna show up next?
Staying tuned to find out.
Keep it up! Loving it!
8/1 c8 20J Shute
Awww. Even crime lords have families, and seeing both cute moments with the bat puts and little Judy was cute, cute, cute!

But of course the heat is turning up, both mobs getting serious.

We also had bloodline flashbacks, BIG feedback for Nick as he makes a great splash in the marshlands, and last but not least... Well, Harlan is gonna get a BIG grilling coming up. Angry wolf probably wished he stayed to barking and not biting.

Lots of interesting things going on. Good job.
7/31 c8 imjustlikehumphery
Great chapter upplet, keep it up! Nick had pretty much the opposite reactions of the Meadowlands when he went to the Marshlands when it came to his speech and the reception he got from the huge crowd he got. He wants to meet with Stagnew for some advice after what wet on which is good to be honest. The deer is right though tryin to go after votes in the Meadowlands isn't gonna do any good when they always vote for prey candidates. Meanwhile with Vlad and Lucy I'm glad that she convinced him to get their pups outta danger and to her sisters place durin this war. Obviously Vlad and Lucy will want some guards posted at Lillian's but the main thing is their pups will be totally outta the conflict. Big understandably is irate about the Subzero Storehouse bein burnt to the ground along with Niko and his men bein killed as well. I just wonder how Big is gonna pull off that blood plan of his though? Unless he knows when and where the Nocturnal Mob's blood supply comes from he can't do much there. I wouldn't doubt he finds a way though. Big is resourceful for sure. As for Clovestone I had a feelin that I was right and it looks like that feelin is gonna be proven if Rupert gettin into a shandy van is any indication. He's the leader of this new group that started this war and who's goin after Nick as well I just know it. Harlan is about to be in boiling hot water with Judy after what happened for sure though. The fact he put not only Zootopian citizens in possible danger but most of all his partner is not gonna do him any favors in Judy's eyes especially and add to the fact that he didn't listen to Mary either before he tried chasin down the van Clovestone got into and u have one pissed off Lieutenant bunny. I wouldn't wanna be in that wolves paws right now. I just hope this isn't gonna come back on Mary as well. Harlan and Mary already have a strained partership after what happened in the conference room they don't need to add more to it. Can't wait for the next chapter!
7/31 c8 1aomagrat
Nick is getting into campaigning and is a hit with the mammals in the Marshlands, good news after a lukewarm reception in the Meadowlands. Maybe Bellwether wasn't wrong about Lionheart needing her to get the sheep vote. Nick's targeting the Prioritization Policy is going to earn him some powerful enemies since a lot of rich and powerful mammals got that way because of it. Lucy and Vlad are becoming more sympathetic characters as this story goes on. I kinda feel sorry for them. Meanwhile the Harlan-Mary ship is hard aground with Harlan facing the wrath of Judy. Another awesome chapter!
7/31 c8 13Berserker88
The situation in the Marshlands sure stinks, but it looks like Nick is ready to take it on and already winning over the crowd there. Big contrast to his less than stellar reception in the Meadowlands. Meanwhile, more great character moments with Lucy, Vlad, and the pups, even Grunt being the comically serious. Also really enjoyed the flashback with Peter, making their current conflict both personal and a bit tragic. And then there's Harlan...falling to the dark side a bit. I can't argue with his position, but damn, seriously not helping your case, O'Conall.
7/31 c8 2GrandTouring
Oh man, another great chapter! Favorite scene by far had to be the one with Harlan and Mary. Intensity was through the roof, both before and during the chase sequence. Harlan also spits some facts that I can really, really relate to. The scene after the chase sequence is great too, because what a cliffhanger. I know we’ll receive updates on what’ll happen to them, but damn, that’s certainly something to leave us off with.

However, don’t take this as an indication that the rest of the chapter wasn’t great, because it was! Now the stakes are rising since Mr. Big is now supposedly giving Vlad about a week to live. Whatever he has up his sleeve, I can’t wait to see it. The rising tension in this gang war is fantastic.

And Nick is still finding lots of success with his campaign! Your expansion of Zootopia as a whole is really interesting, and I love seeing all these new environments you’ve made. Interesting people, interesting settings, it’s just amazing all around.

Alright, I think that’s all I have to say! Keep up the great work :D
7/30 c8 grishjae29a
OOoh, Mr. Big better not kill Vlad and Lucy's children! That'd be too far, just proving Vlad's point. But he's got a family of his own to protect, and sooner or later one or the other is gonna have to give. The crime war part of the story is probably my favorite part, it could really go either way. So engaging!
But Nick and Judy arenot to be slept on, if Nick's speech in swampland is any indication. He'd make a great politician. Meanwhile Judy's probably got a lot of paperwork now thanks to Harlan's screwup. I can see him getting fired for this.
Anther great chapter!
7/30 c8 6FredCat
So many balancing level paragraphs in this chapter, only to end with a bad one on Harlan and Mary. Let's hope Harlan wraps it up with Judy Hopps whether he could.

Keep it up! Looking forward to the next chapter.
7/30 c8 fredricksacc
Intense new chapter! So many things to cover. First off, Nick's trip to the marshlands gave some really interesting world building. I don't think I've seen anyone cover that district before, so seeing you write it was an interesting experience. I have to wonder if those volunteers will be of any plot significance...

Nick and Judy's phone call was as adorable as it was amusing. You have their chemistry down to a T. Bradley makes me suspicious though. He's up to something.

Poor Harlan and Mary. This accident will definitely come back to bite them. Judy is sure to give them a thorough chewing out I'm sure, particularly Harlan. Negative character arc perhaps? Excited to see more. Update soon!
7/14 c5 Malik-Elalaoui
i love the suit situation too much! i really hope the anchors do mention Nicks outfit.
that way i can see Samantha explode even more! x,D
and i also think, that there is some sabotage about Nicks petition.
and something about Bradley does seem odd. :/

but i am really interested in that "Project Everest". what could it be? :)
7/13 c7 dracotwo
the meadowlands district is really kinda unexplored in most stories. guess authors think of rolling hills, flat land and lots of grasses. but so much can be hidden underneath golden waves of grain. Still loving the story even if I have missed seeing the duo working together.
7/10 c7 Wildefox25
Really enjoyed the raid at the beginning. The fight, and possible foreshadowing, between Lucy and Niko. Whoo! More backstory for Lucy! She may be a villain but I'm still rooting for her. And we meet her sister too. And Grunt again too!
Nick's campaign seems to be going well. Even if it's attracted some undesirable attention.
I really like your depiction of the Meadowlands. Reminds me a lot of some places I've been.
It's cool seeing Peter getting more time in the spotlight too. Really interested in seeing more of how his and Lucy's relationship went wrong.
Loving it still!
Oh yeah, the plot lines are all coming together!
7/9 c1 OblivionXT
Your writing has gotten sooooooo good! I tried to get into When Instinct Falls several times, but it never hooked me enough. This is something else, bravo my friend.
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