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7/23 c8 2SnooksTheAllMighty
OMG I've just been absolutely in LOVE with this series you did an amazing job with it, and the way you portrayed Jackie and Hyde's relationship has just been so cute and amazing like I don't think I've read a story this great with this sort of AU since 'That 70s show' by Zenmaster21, like seriously it was amazing, keep up the amazing work and I hope you're doing better. :P
7/14 c7 4Sprout76
Ok, I am still waiting
7/11 c6 Sprout76
Waiting for the final chapter of this story to drop
7/11 c6 Guest57
This is amazing! I have no other words for how amazing your stories are. Keep up the amazing work!
7/11 c6 Guest
I'm just so glad you update so soon this story, I wouldn't be able to sleep at night!
7/11 c6 jackiesunshine
I really love this! I find this Jackie and Hyde so adorable I just want them to be happy. And for Edna to leave Hyde alone. Love your work I’m always excited whenever you post something!
7/10 c6 2SnooksTheAllMighty
AWWW I fucking loved this, and I hate you a little bit for ending it like that, I really love this story, it's so heartwarming and wholesome, minus the whole Edna thing but seriously keep up the great work and trust me people don't hate you over here we're just really lazy :p
7/9 c5 SnooksTheAllMighty
Omg, it's finally here! I have been so excited for this fic, the stargazing scene was so cute can not wait to read more :p
4/30 c4 ILI
You made me love fluff!
4/29 c4 SnooksTheAllMighty
Omg, this was so damn cute
4/29 c4 4Sprout76
So cute love this one
4/17 c3 Guest
I have to disagree with you because really liked it!
4/15 c1 27MistyMountainHop
I like the tension with Jackie not wanting to lie to Hyde about participating in the roller-disco contest and Eric needing her to lie (and why he feels like he has to be secret about it). This shows a lot about where their characters are emotionally.

Eric bowing to the taunts of Donna, Red, and everyone else who joined in and tossing away his skates makes me sad. He let the opinions of others rob him of something he enjoys doing. And, quite frankly, Donna should’ve recognized this and had a change of heart. She should’ve realized they were being abusive toward Eric and supportive of his roller-disco dream, even though she’d need time to get over seeing him in the outfit.

On the show, this was all done for laughs. Not serious characterization, but your one-shot brings depth to the situation. It reminds me of how Jackie supports Hyde when he decides to work at Red’s muffler shop. Despite that it’s not her ideal job / career for him (for several reasons), she’s happy for him because working there makes Hyde happy. I truly believe that Donna would feel the same (eventually) about Eric making roller-disco a hobby. She might even think that it’s a dying “art” anyway, so she won’t have long to wait until Eric is forced to find a new hobby.

Oh, no. Donna thinks Eric and Jackie are having an affair, lmao. At least Hyde is rational enough to see how illogical that is and not jump to conclusions, as he says. I don’t believe Donna would actually jump to that conclusion either. She’d think it was anything *but* that. But for the sake of this story I’m willing to suspend my disbelief. :D

Donna and Hyde overhearing Jackie and Eric’s roller-disco conversation and misinterpreting it is classic *Three’s Company*! (A U.S. sitcom that originally aired in the 1970s and 1980s.) I like how you wrote that scene. That’s exactly how it would go.

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[“Jackie, it’s been a week already, would you stop shoving your huge diamond on my face?” Donna asked, looking annoyed, and Jackie just smiled.

“But it’s so big!” She beamed, and turned to look at Hyde, who had his arm wrapped around her waist “Look, pudding!”

“I know it’s big Jackie, I bought it”] – This exchange is adorable!

[“Every room and almost every single piece of furniture was already christened” Hyde replied] – LMAO

[“Why do you need a dresser?” Hyde asked

”Care to explain, Eric?” Donna said, and Eric sighed

“I broke ours by recreating Luke Skywalker’s and Darth Vader’s epic lightsaber duel from ‘The Empire Strikes Back’ with a broomstick” He admitted] – Eric and Hyde apparently have very different ideas about how to use furniture, lol.

["You brought your outfit? The competition is in two days and we need to practice with our outfits on so we can get used to them"] – Smart

[Mitch and his girlfriend were our biggest competition, but now he's in the hospital because he tried to lift her and things got pretty bad pretty quickly"] – Hee-hee-hee. This line shouldn’t make me a little giddy, but it does. (You likely know how much I dislike Mitch’s character).

["Yep, my man is amazing" Jackie smiled dreamily “I love him so much”

"Alright that's enough" Eric said "Let's go before it gets dark.] – You do a good job making clear that this story is not about a potential Jackie/Eric romance but about them having an in-character, tension-filled partnership for the sake of their mutual interest: roller-disco.

[Donna analyzed her boyfriend and her best friend. As soon as she noticed their outfits, she looked down at the floor in shame.] – GOOD! She should hang her head in shame and embarrassment. I mean, really? lol.

["Are you cheating on me with Forman?" Hyde asked (…)

"What?!" Jackie shrieked in indignation "Are you insane?!"

"You tell me!" Hyde said "Wedding planning my ass!"] – HYDE! COME ON! *shouts so much* You’re better than this, man. (Well, not really if we go by how the T7S writers eventually characterized him, bleh.)

[The minute Hyde looked at their outfits realization hit him, and he felt like the stupidest man alive.] – He is among them in this story, rofl.

["Because the last time you caught me roller skating went so well" Eric said wryly "I didn't want my own girlfriend to make fun of my hobbies again!"

"Crap…" Donna said "I'm sorry, I wasn't thinking"

"You damn right you weren't!" Eric said] – Yay! Eric told her the truth, and Donna owns it!

["I'm sorry!" Donna said "It's that time of the month, you know?"] – No, Donna. No. You are a feminist. You do not internalize and parrot patriarchal B.S. like that. Besides, “the time of the month” isn’t what causes hormone swings. It’s PMS (premenstrual syndrome). Once the period arrives, one’s hormones start to smooth out, as does one’s mood. (Almost every sitcom has gotten this wrong, from the early days ‘til now.)

["We've been together for years, and I was never the one who cheated"

Hyde rubbed his temple and sighed. He sat next to her and removed his sunglasses.

”I know" He said, looking sad and ashamed

"Crap, I'm sorry, I shouldn't have said that" Jackie said] – Jackie, you *definitely* should have said that. If Hyde hasn’t learned from his mistakes by now, it’s time to dump his ass.

["It's okay doll, you're right" He said] – Oh, good. Hyde knows Jackie shouldn’t be sorry, too.

["Wait a minute…" Jackie said "You thought I was sleeping with someone else, and you came here to yell at me?"

"Yeah…" He answered "I'm sorry"

"You didn't run away and slept with someone else!" She said, letting out a couple of tears and smiling.] – Oh, God, how sad is it the bar is set so low? LOL I mean, had this situation happened during season 6 or 7, all right. It would show Hyde’s growth. But this late in the game, when they’re already engaged … oh, boy.

["Promise me that if you ever have those stupid thoughts about me and someone else again, you'll come and yell and me"] – What she should ask him to promise her is not to have those kinds of stupid thoughts about her in the first place. To trust her since she’s earned it repeatedly.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this one-shot! Despite some OOC-ness of Donna and Hyde – and Jackie letting Hyde off the hook way too easily – it’s a breezy, fun read! Jackie and Eric being roller-disco partners is something quite a few fans have wanted to see depicted in fanfic, and I think people will be happy reading your take on it!
4/14 c3 1Love Jackie Hyde
This was so cute, I love this story, hope you update soon!
4/11 c3 Guest
This was beautiful and sweet and all fluffy, I love the prompt game and your stories so much!
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