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9/5 c5 CarBarrier
Great chapter! Keep up the great work! :)
9/4 c5 Zero
LOLOLOLOLOLOL
9/4 c4 Zero
DAM
9/4 c3 Zero
Nice !
9/4 c2 Zero
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9/4 c1 Zero
Not bad.
9/4 c5 Animelord245
Great chapter!
9/3 c4 Guest
"claiming that the girl might pose a threat" that being considered as rude or as you say FRUSTRATED BULLYING, which is dumb, to later grab her like that is so stupid. Hero or not I doubt someone would even let you be in the hospital after that, and considering that aizawa was there even if the comment was actually bad he wouldn't let midoriya act like that.

A nurse showing concern for people who are gonna visit the girl who made her father disappear is valid enough, she is a kid with a dangerous quirk that she can't control. I love eri, but considering that she could have made Deku dissapear if it wasn't for Aizawa in canon, she is dangerous. That's the whole point of her learning to control her quirk.

That scene was just dumb, but aside from that, the whole repeating scenes is the bigger problem for this. Narrating what happens and then putting the dialog just makes it repetitive, just put the dialog and put what they did while they where saying it.

This chapters would feel so short if it wasn't for that, it just feels like filler, like when you have to make an essay and instead of saying things normally you just put more words that mean the same thing just to fill space.
8/3 c4 CarBarrier
Great chapter! Keep up the great work
7/12 c1 Choko
I really like your concept and your writing has really improved over the past 2 years, this story reads like it's from a completely different person so kudos to you for working so hard to improve your writing. That being said, your writing is still to still and reads out like someone summarizing a story, choppy with very little flow in between paragraphs. However, this is a really easy thing to fix, it mostly involves reading different authors works (and no fanfiction won't help with this). From the way your write I'm gonna guess that you read a lot of light novels, usually I'd say to stay away from translated stories to improve your writing however some of them are masterclasses in writing, if you're looking to write a story in first person classroom of the elite and the way the translator represent ayanakouji is as good as I've seen it get. For third person i can't thing of anything from the light novel realm as most of those are written in first person, so I suggest picking up a western English novel and adapting the writing style (remember to pick something modern so that any old writing mannerisms from years past don't slip into your writing). Anyways I hope that you will apply this advise and to be able to read your new and updates stories soon. Cheers
6/4 c2 centinel 432
From what I see this will be a back in time story, I think this is a great fic, update soon please
4/23 c1 Guest
Concept has been done before, but the real problem with this fic is the writing style. It's pretty much all written in past-tense. It's also hard to focus on with it not having much dialogue. Could be better, could be a whole lot worse. But it's a Nejire fic so I approve. That cute bundle of curiosity needs more love.
4/6 c1 Jinwoo
Please update soon:))))
4/5 c1 Me
It was a nice chapter, except for the whole Tamaki worrying about Deku being a pervert... aren't you tired of writting the same thing? Seriously it's a shame your nejirexIzuku stories always end up feeling so similar. Don't take it the wrong way, it's enjoyable but if you start a new story you might as well try something new.
4/5 c1 crazybeebee
Always and I mean, Always happy to see IzuHado.

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