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6/23 c2 73Fox the Writer
Huh. That's quite a switch - Buzz becoming a Wirewolf instead of Mira? I like this change! And I like this chapter, although it was hard to read and not in a bad way! It was hard to read because... well, poor Ty! It's heartbreaking to see him in his conscious Wirewolf state - he's stuck in this big cannon and he can't do anything to escape it, at least not without help. I think he's going to have a lot of nightmares after this horrendous event. But hold on, Ty - help is on the way! Great job with this latest chapter, my friend! Keep it up. :D
3/16 c1 Fox the Writer
Oh no... no, no, this isn't good! Wake up, Ty, snap out of it! NOS-4-A2, you are a tyrant and a half. Sheesh!

But in all seriousness, this writing... my goodness... I really felt for Ty in this chapter. Heck, I cringed on behalf of Ty because of the pain and misery he's going through thanks to his running away and encountering NOS-4-A2. The details about his transformation... brr! Chilling to the bone, especially the wires going into his neck!

I like how his headache actually seems to act as a 'sixth sense' of some sort to alert him that something was wrong. That's a nice detail to add on for him as he runs away from XL trying to catch him!

I think the ending is very interesting - Ty from within the Wirewolf blacks out as the Wirewolf is under NOS' control. It's as though Ty, for now, is slowly encaged and almost washed out from the Wirewolf's memory while under the control of the energy vampire. Ohhoho boy!

I think this is a spooky cool and great start to this story! I think this is one of my favorite pieces you've done so far - the atmosphere is dramatic, the POV is informative and there's a lot more detail behind the scenes which I'm glad you've included in to build up the suspense. I'm curious to see where this goes. Well done my friend! Keep it up! :)

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