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7/15 c6 72Wendy McCalister
As usual, this was a wonderful update from you dear 3 I was squealing throughout, even though they were essentially arguing, but that last bit XD I can’t wait to be active in FFnet again so that I could write and read stories from my fellow authors. Glad to see that you’re still updating though. Hoping to read more from you soon!
7/4 c6 Kyoandyuya
Used my father's phone so I'll just post as guest.

Anyway as always, the classic "she gets mad, stomps away, gets in trouble, and rescued by her lover wanting to earn her forgiveness" will never not be in any fics with lover's quarrel. Still cute of course.

But I did read some mistakes I believe you'll need to edit.

It should be "...pathetic attempt at stoicism" in Hiei's words.

I'm curious why Botan didn't just fight back with her scythe if she could? Otherwise it would not really make sense why she can dare to face off against the nurse but not that tiger demon y'know?

I don't think adhere fits Botan's monologue about obtaining a powerful lover. It sounds off and the effort for the bond implies solely on her part, w/o the other party giving back the same effort for it (or so at least as how it comes off to me). So it should be something that intimates reciprocation like "capture the interest" or "fascinate a powerful being like her legendary fox lover".

It should also be "...sliver of attraction" not silver.

"...argent lines" not ardent.

"Pure adoration" instead of pure adulation.

It's okay. All of us need beta in writing for our own grammar check lol. I myself needed it with mine.

P.S. Kurama's profile as translated by Mori in twitter even says "first love (?)" on the line connecting to her which means it's definitely possible for him to like her in a romantic sense depending on how one interprets his character then. Still, given that he IS ancient and he did perceive his mother as someone he merely tolerated for the sake of waiting until getting older in his human form, I don't perceive him falling in love when he never noticed her feelings before her confession. Just fondness which never got anywhere after removing her memories.
6/6 c5 1kyoandyuya
Oh my gosh! What a perfect follow up from that last chap! ? It just removed the bad taste left over completely! My faves be sealing their relationship with a kiss eh?
6/6 c4 kyoandyuya
Bruh, thanks for another cute chapter from you. I'll be honest though. As much as I am squealing with the sheer cuteness within this chapter, I'm also a bit irked with the implication that Maya is Shuichi/Kurama's type. I never did like her even if many perceive her as kind. I spent watching the OVA thinking "this is supposed to be a potential love interest for Kurama? She's annoying." I'm sorry, but I interpreted her words and confession quite differently than most. It's why I was never on board with her in any romantic capacity with Kurama.

It just soothes me how you made sure to place a distinction between Botan and Maya in Kurama's life now. Besides, I understood how it could mean that Kurama felt something romantic for Maya, but at the same time I'm not truly on board with it given that for all his adolescence, he's still a millenia-old demon. It's more akin to a child professing love to an old man y'know?

Okay before people rain on my parade with Raizen and Lady Doctor, it's not the same. There is no power imbalance between them both because LD got something that made Raizen hesitate and change his plans. Maya didn't have that with Shuichi/Kurama. Not to mention, both are technically adults while the one with Kurama and Maya feels awfully lot like robbing the cradle.

But enough with the rant. I just love how Botan's all oblivious while Kurama be all dropping hints. That's why him declaring their new step into a relationship is so satisfying to read.

P.S As you can see, I don't have any problems with your grammar this time. Just Maya. XD
5/29 c4 3sweetcanines
Awww, this is such a feel-good story (heart) Yes, Kurama!
5/26 c1 Guest
I'm glad that your still there to write a kb story coz the other is no longer active on writing you know I've been always waiting for the update of all writer of kb stories..hoping for the next chapter. And for another story. I'm afraid that if there is no more kb new stories to come.i only love reading kb story. Please stay and don't leave us. Keep going. Thank you
5/16 c3 1kyoandyuya
D'aww! This is so cute! It's even more so with the FLAMES bit. I used to play this as a child with my fave ships you have no idea. I forgot what A, and S means though.
3/15 c1 heartluv
This was super sweet! I loved how you showed Kurama allowing Botan into his life 3
3/15 c1 Guest
Finally your back. Coz I'm waiting for the next chapter of the last marigold.. And I like this new story of you. Anything about kurama and botan.

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