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3/28 c1 DIBPants
Another great story. I like the incorporation of HG and his connections. As a possible continuation of this story, possibly a romantic linkup between he and Deputy Ferris. There seems to have been a connection between the two, and they both exist on the periphery of the Grimm World. Even as a one shot, it was still an entertaining story. Thanks as always for quenching my Grimm thirst.
3/27 c1 136rebecca-in-blue
Hi, here from the "Never in a Million Years" challenge and fandom-blind, though that wasn't really an issue. The plot feels accessible, and I like how you write these characters in a way that gets readers invested. It was kinda funny and sad how the microwave, then the doorbell interrupted Hank's thoughts of suicide in that opening scene. His actual attempt to shoot himself in front of Jarold and Aida was intense and well-done, and it was good to see them reassuring him that he is a good person and should get help. It should also help him to know that at least one of his divorces wasn't really his fault.

The story did feel a bit rushed towards the end, especially compared to that slower, detailed opening scene of Hank loading his gun. It seemed like there was a lot of dialogue and short sentences. Being fandom-blind, the only two parts that I found confusing were the schematics of Jarold and Aida's grandparents (which sounded complicated to me) and when the characters began transforming into animals, which was a bit startling since this fandom didn't appear to be supernatural at first). Not knowing these characters, I also couldn't tell which action was the one that Hank would never take - attempting suicide? reconnecting with his ex-wife? Anyway, good luck in the contest!
3/25 c1 Sapphire02
Una historia entorno a Hank interesante, algo novedoso que merece una oportunidad
Hank no es muy suertudo a la hora del romance y el alma gemela, encontrar un enfoque que lo haga ser parte del mundo wesen desde hace un tiempo lo hace ver que es el compa?ero detective correcto para nick, me emocionaste y asustaste cuando leí lo que intenta hacer con el arma, traía los nervios de punta aun sabiendo que no podías eliminarlo pero la posibilidad estaba ahí, sabes emocionar y poner en suspenso a las personas... Espero se pueda desarrollar esta historia para mas, tiene potencial esperando que Hank tenga su historia feliz lo merece.

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