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7/14 c2 107AnimeGirl 144
Okay! This is later than I meant to review it BUT HERE I AM.

This chapter was so good. Usually I try to review in order of how the story was written, but I'm just going to be all over the board so sorry for any whiplashing you may get (I hereby deny any responsibility for doctor bills).

This chapter had it all! Dexter's time machine presentation from the Legacy trailer, his talking to the volunteer from the game tutorial, and Buttercup's unfortunate situation at Mojo's hands from the game's missions and the Legacy manga. I loved the tweak you did on the whole thing. Instead of DeeDee sending the volunteer to the future, having it be Mojo's interference is so good! Plus, it ties in nicely with Buttercup's disappearance, which, even though we all knew this was happening, it was still gripping to read.

Ben and Dexter jumping in (plus Computress, Max and Rook) to assist with crowd control while the Girls handled Mojo was a nice touch. Only mildly shocked that Dexter wouldn't exact his own revenge against Mojo Jojo for messing up his presentation (and potentially harming the volunteer as far as anyone is concerned), but taking out the monkey minions was probably the better way to go.

Buttercup's disappearance was expected, but it was Blossom and Bubbles' reactions that were the gutting part. By the time the game happens, Blossom and Bubbles have more or less composed themselves, but in the moment we get to see their anger and pain. Side note, this HEAVILY reminds me of "Hereafter" from Justice League. A missing superhero, a villain in a robot contraption hitting said superhero with an energy beam, an extremely, emotionally compromised superheroine(s in this case) beating the ever loving snot out of the villain, and a speedster stopping them from killing the villain. I had goosebumps reading it.

The sad moment between Professor Utonium and his daughters was so heartbreaking, but also showed a great family dynamic (**insert an insult at the CW PPG because I will die before letting that go**). Ben willingly stepping in between the two Girls and their victim was incredibly brave. Sure, he was doing so as XLR8, but that was still gutsy. I liked that he was there to help bring them back from the edge, and hope to see how the rest of humanity and superhero community respond to Buttercup's loss.

Excellent chapter. I can't wait for the next chapter!
5/24 c1 AnimeGirl 144
FIRST!

Okay but seriously, I'm loving this. I like long chapters and this was such a fun read.

I like seeing the Professor and Dexter having their discussion, because honestly they would meet up. I'd argue it's almost required for them to have at least one scientific discussion.

Having Orchid Bay being across from Townsville is amazing and I wish FF did that. Although if you listened to me, I'd just complain about things they should have done instead.

(After reading that horrific PPG script today, I am so happy to see the Professor characterized as he should be. It was super refreshing and I'm so pleased to see it.)

Dexter questioning the time machine project is actually really refreshing. I don't know too many stories that delve into the genius' psyche when doing this (it's usually after the event goes wrong). Seeing him hear out the Professor's complaints and then questioning it himself is pretty cool to see, especially since he's already dabbled with time travel.

Aha! It is Numbuh Two (and the KND) who notice something is entering the solar system. This honestly makes a lot of sense and wish it was used in the game's lore. So many missed opportunities, but then again, that's why fanfiction exists.

Really solid first chapter! I had a lot of fun reading this, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Having Mojo attack a cargo ship just outside of Orchid Bay and having Ben and and the Puffs respond to it was such a good idea. I thought you were going to have him take off in a space suit like how the manga set him up (or at least his absence). This direction is better.

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