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7/6 c1 FuryJoe
great story
5/27 c1 1Trobus10
Well done! This was a thoughtful, well written, and enjoyable re-casting of that unfortunate scene. It is descriptive without drowning in detail, reasonably concise without being spartan, and well balanced between a properly dour beginning and a more lighthearted ending.

It is a little funny reading this, as someone who only days earlier wrote a rendition of the same scene with nearly the same, divergent outcome. (Thank you for reviewing it!) Despite all those similarities and almost the exact same moment of divergence from the episode, from there the paths to our similar destinations couldn't have been more different. Your Lenore fully pulls back from the brink, won over by Hector's arguments and invitation to a healthier outlook on life. Mine barely survives her existential crisis, swayed only by a grim sense of duty to live another day. Personally I think Lenore's inner struggles ran deeper than the show made immediately apparent, but I definitely respect the genuine hope you manage to bring to your take on things.

This is getting long, I know, so I will wrap up with the one (other?) thing I want to note constructively: I think going forward, any crossposts from Ao3 will be better consolidated into series of chapters, than made separate stories. That is just my experience on this shrinking website. Really, don't read too much into this.

Fantastic work. I look forward to reviewing the next part.

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