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7/16 c3 5BeforexImxDead
This is a neat idea that I haven't seen before! I would love to see where things develop more if you were ever inclined to write more. I really think you have something here! And if you ask me, I wouldn't mind the other review, some grammar mistakes will always slip even with someone editing your work. I've found plenty of grammar mistakes in published books I've read that are looked over multiple times by professional editors. ] Hope you are well! 3
6/23/2019 c1 14Merlyn Pyndragon
*cue guitar* F*ck this shIt I'm out (mm-mm) F*ck this sh*t I'm out (no thanks) Don't mind me, Imma just grab my stuff and leave, 'scuse me please...
Honestly I would take the fire and radiation to being stuck down there with the "brilliant villains." :P Nice oneshot. It was quite a nightmare situation. When Joseph started to bend the bar restraining the door wheel, my eyes widened xD
Not to be a grammar Nazi, but I think you need to go on a homonym-eradication. I tend to bypass stories that have a blatant grammatical error in the summary (should be "They all were," not where.) because if they're there, they're inevitably in the story as well and nits like me are easily distracted from the story by them. I was just too curious to bypass this story ;) If you have troubles with homonyms like where and were, I just remember that where has 'here' in it, and both words relate to location. (It's where? It's here.)
Thanks for sharing :3

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