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8/18/2020 c8 13Meirelle
Nice ending.
8/12/2020 c7 Meirelle
Oh, no. The poor Boy. :(
3/27/2020 c5 Anon
I really like how you described the essence of the story he was telling them without telling it yourself. though I think it would do better if you added a bit more detail to the storytelling maybe give it a bit more meat for us to be equally entranced by what the boy is telling, you already have a good start. On another note, those poor girls, wouldn't mind it too much if Hernan didn't make it past the next few chapters due to a completely unforeseen tragedy that no one could have possibly avoided and left all his wonderful wealth for those girls.
3/27/2020 c4 Anon
wow, this one is a lot to take in. I like the camaraderie beginning to form, though I think you should read this chapter over, some parts are a little patchwork but overall it's still good.
3/27/2020 c3 Anon
DANG I loved this chapter! very well done at showing the sheer contrast of what the outsider was before to who he is now!
3/27/2020 c2 Anon
I am not sure because as I mentioned before I haven't played the dlc but this outburst from Billie seems a little unprovoked and a little rushed. But as I've said I haven't played the dlc so I'm not sure what the Outsider ever did to them. Anyway please continue to write I feel this is a very unique story and I'd LOVE to see where it goes!
3/27/2020 c1 Anon
I am envious of your writing ability! So far this has a good pace set to it and the exposition was almost undetectable, which is wonderful because most people like to ham fist that right down your throat. I haven't played the dlc for the game but I knew the gist of what happened but you are managing to make the aftermath feel very genuine! also I'm sorry this doesn't have many reviews, it deserves so much more!
3/26/2020 c5 Meirelle
I saw this had no reviews, and that's disappointing, because this story is really good.

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