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8/6/2020 c3 34Jack797
There it is: The fear of the unknown. Lovecraft's style of horror. Nice job. The "Drip" thing kind of went on too much, but it didn't hurt the story at all. I get the feeling a lot of great authors probably would've written it like that. Very nice job though. Keep on working on this if you're able to! :D
8/6/2020 c2 Jack797
I would complain about the repetitive use of the word "Dreams" in the first paragraph, but I think the number of times you used the word was fine to get your point across. This chapter was pretty good, I'll admit. Still a bit confused the narrator hasn't been named even though someone else was in this chapter. Not really much of a complaint considering out of the H. P. Lovecraft stories I've read so far (I'm currently reading a complete collection of them on my Kindle), I think he's used the narrators' names only once for two of the ones I've read. Also, because of how strange the name "Gtuyin" looks, I'm guessing that's a fictional city, but I'm not an expert on the US map, so I could be wrong.
8/6/2020 c1 Jack797
Very nice setup in my opinion. I think it probably would've been a better idea to introduce whoever the heck is talking in this chapter, but it's still not bad the way you told it. Also, the references to music I definitely like because I DO love to sing, heh. You did a decent job here, I'll admit though
7/6/2019 c1 1Chubbypencil
very good, I do have to say, though is it going to continue or was this it... And also who is talking and also what's happening... But other than that it's pretty good!
7/5/2019 c1 75Tim66
Wow, that was short. I'm guessing more is coming?

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