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7/5/2020 c1 1HuntMASTERV
I got around to reading the latest chapters and I have to say this story is getting interesting.
4/21/2020 c1 Antonross58
Wonderful write up by Vivienne in Spain .

The earth whispered but you did not hear.
The earth spoke but you did not listen
The earth screamed but you turned her off.
And so I was born...

I was not born to punish you..
I was born to awaken you..

The earth cried out for help...
Massive flooding. But you didn't listen.
Burning fires. But you didn't listen.
Strong hurricanes. But you didn't listen.
Terrifying Tornadoes. But you didn't listen.

You still don't listen to the earth when.
Ocean animals are dying due to pollutants in the waters.
Glaciers melting at an alarming rate.
Severe drought.

You didn't listen to how much negativity the earth is receiving.
Non-stop wars.
Non-stop greed.
You just kept going on with your life..
No matter how much hate there was..
No matter how many killings daily..

It was more important to get that latest iPhone than worry about what the earth was trying to tell you..
But now I am here.

And I've made the world stop in its tracks.
I've made YOU finally listen.
I've made you take refuge.
I've made you stop thinking about materialistic things..

Now you are like the earth...
You are only worried about YOUR survival.

How does that feel?

I give you fever.. as the fires burn on earth.
I give you respiratory issues.. as pollution filled the earth’s air.
I give you weakness as the earth weakens every day.

I took away your comforts..
Your outings.
The things you would use to forget about the planet and its pain.

And I made the world stop...
And now...

China has better air quality.. Skys are clear blue because factories are not spewing pollution unto the earth's air.
The water in Venice is clean and Because the gondola boats that pollute the water are not being used.

YOU are having to take time to reflect on what is important in your life.

Again I am not here to punish you.. I am here to Awaken you...

When all this is over and I am gone...
Please remember these moments..

Listen to the earth.
Listen to your soul.

Stop Polluting the earth.
Stop Fighting amongst each other.

Stop caring about materialistic things.
And start loving your neighbors.

Start caring about the earth and all its creatures.
Start believing in a Creator.

Because next time I may come back even stronger...

Signed,
Coronavirus

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4/13/2020 c4 Anon
This is great so far. I really like your writing style but it can be a bit daunting with the wall of text. I saw on your profile that you won't take feedback into consideration from anonymous reviews but i will still leave a bit of feedback for you to consider regardless.

- Try to separate the paragraphs when dialogue is being said to one another. It makes it easier to read and follow.
- Be a little more descriptive whenever you can when mentioning environments and expressions of characters etc.
- Use different varieties of descriptive words and try to refrain from using the same expressions that Winnie or Dennis do. You seem to fall into a habit of making them smile or blush a lot. I haven't really seen this happen as much on this story, but definitely in your past stories.

But so far, i would give this story a 7/10 so far. Keep going with it!
8/26/2019 c1 guest review
Good day, Nice to see a new WinnieXdennis story, but you need to rewrite this, it is just a giant wall of text. Have you not ever read a book or other fanfiction? Everytime a new person speaks, it must be a new line. You should not have two different speakers in the same line. This is hard to read because it is just a wall of text and not formatted correctly.

Try re-typing this properly then repost it, take it down until you do it correctly, don't make other people suffer with this just wall of text

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