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12/20 c67 8Superdale33
I think your romance writing is very well done. I like how it has clear influence on Akira from time to time. And seeing the two interact does bring out a different part of Akira that's nice to see. Love is supposed to bring the best out of ourselves, so to see Akira try and take those steps is fun to read. I also like the approach you have between Hifumi and Akira. It follows the Confidant route but feels more open and natural. It probably helps you incorporate hang outs too like when they went to buy books. Even stuff like asking Hifumi to help with Yusuke was also a great way to drive sone tension and shake things up. And it just makes sense too, since they're friends. Having them bond with books fleshes out their romance too, so it doesn't aleays revolve around shogi or other similar games.

Also, I didn't know you would do more relationships! I had a feeling you would with how some characters interact, but I wasn't sure. I'm totally on board for it. Mostly to see how it changes the dynamic of these versions of the characters and how it'll impact the story (if at all). You're doing well so far with the romance, despite being new to it, so I have confidence you can pull it off.
12/19 c68 Uday Sra
Awesome
12/14 c67 1Survivor1605
Honestly, I giggled when Morgana went to bed first. About the romance, I feel you are doing a pretty good job because even while playing the games I always felt weird that you met a girl in a semi-crisis situation and could get involved with her romantically in the next 2-3 months. I kinda felt in the games most of the romances were rushed. With your story, you introduced Hifumi much much earlier and are giving the protagonist time with her. The interactions are very well put and honestly very enjoyable to read.
12/12 c67 Uday Sra
Ok
12/5 c66 Uday Sra
Good
12/4 c66 1Ayayacchi
Still really enjoying it. Honestly, it makes my day whenever you update. I’m loving that you’re touching upon issues that really should have been touched on, and that the palaces and party members joined up at different times to really spice things up.
11/29 c65 Uday Sra
Good
11/21 c64 Uday Sra
Awesome
11/19 c63 Uday Sra
Awesome
11/14 c63 1Defender31415
Nice job. Akira’s got some issues to work through. Hopefully the others can help. Also, nice job calling out the hypocrisy in the plan to open the door.
11/13 c1 Guest
I thought I was the only one who noticed that it said “oxymoron” on their hats... oh well
11/2 c61 3Aramaki
This is such a fucking rollercoaster, it's one of the best things I've read in a long time. Your Akira is amazing and I love what you've done with the world. And especially the thing with Yusuke. The nude painting fiasco is played for a joke and never talked about again. Even the Catholic bits are spot on, speaking as a former Catholic. I'm totally amazed at the slow transformation Akira is undergoing too.
10/23 c60 1Survivor1605
Well, I feel that you setting up for HIfumi to join the thieves since the queen codename is still not taken but even if that does not happen personally I would not be bothered since I enjoy your writing style and the story up to this point has been amazing. Keep up the good work 3
10/22 c1 Tactical-Magician
Interesting story.
10/17 c2 8Superdale33
I like how in this chapter the changes start affecting the story, and it honestly makes it interesting to see what's changed. It's more than simply changing one or two things, then re-telling the story. You take those changes and see where they go. Having a more aggressive Akira is definitely the biggest one. It brings out different sides to the other characters we usually wouldn't get to see. That, along with giving him a goal, a religion, and a more fleshed out background gives him a lot more nuance. He's more engaging, both in conversations and for readers. It gives his actions more logic, and actually influences his personality. But at the same time, he's not a completely different character. He's still close enough to the game version by keeping his morals the same. I will say, though, this chapter is a little light. It's more of a bridge to get to the good stuff. So while it's not bad by any stretch, there isn't too much going on.
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