1/8 c39 DarthJacob1
That's karma for you Kion. You shouldn't have banished and turn on Jasiri for your pwn selfish gain.
That's karma for you Kion. You shouldn't have banished and turn on Jasiri for your pwn selfish gain.
6/2/2020 c29 1spotteddogo
Oh no! Man, that fight among the cubs was so frustrating! I really hope an adult comes to Jakir before he does anything too hurtful *fingers crossed*
Oh no! Man, that fight among the cubs was so frustrating! I really hope an adult comes to Jakir before he does anything too hurtful *fingers crossed*
5/15/2020 c28 spotteddogo
Another beautiful chapter. Sibling love is so underrepresented. Keep up the great work. What will become the jackals once Baturu's army confronts them?
Another beautiful chapter. Sibling love is so underrepresented. Keep up the great work. What will become the jackals once Baturu's army confronts them?
1/7/2020 c17 Mamaluigi24
I knew it! I knew Jasiri had nothing to do with this! I’m so glad she and Janja managed to escape. I hope they’ll be fine.
I knew it! I knew Jasiri had nothing to do with this! I’m so glad she and Janja managed to escape. I hope they’ll be fine.
12/1/2019 c12 Arika Koski
I don't like Kion, Kiara and Rani being mean.
I don't like Kion, Kiara and Rani being mean.
12/2/2019 c1 9Rogue-Lion
Ok it’s been a while since I delved into the review section of other fan stories, but I’m interested to seeing what’s out there
Though right off the back I want to point out that there are not 4 kings. There are 2 kings and 2 queens.
Personally I at first found the concept of a council intriguing, but I found myself just thrown into this world with no solid ground to stand on. Right off the back we see an assertive Kion in the Pride Lands, find out Simba is dead, and learn that the this council concept is falling apart before it even begins.
Furthermore I just found the personalities and demeanors of Kion and the others to be just off putting. If it was a build up for them to change over time then I’d roll with it. But... it’s just put in the reader’s face and going: “This is how they are and how it is. Don’t worry about how.”
So that’s my take on chapter 1. I’ll see how the other chapters fair, though I personally feel this type of story would work much better as a Pride Lands origin story before Simba. But ok. I’ll see where this goes.
Hope my insight makes sense and helps.
Ok it’s been a while since I delved into the review section of other fan stories, but I’m interested to seeing what’s out there
Though right off the back I want to point out that there are not 4 kings. There are 2 kings and 2 queens.
Personally I at first found the concept of a council intriguing, but I found myself just thrown into this world with no solid ground to stand on. Right off the back we see an assertive Kion in the Pride Lands, find out Simba is dead, and learn that the this council concept is falling apart before it even begins.
Furthermore I just found the personalities and demeanors of Kion and the others to be just off putting. If it was a build up for them to change over time then I’d roll with it. But... it’s just put in the reader’s face and going: “This is how they are and how it is. Don’t worry about how.”
So that’s my take on chapter 1. I’ll see how the other chapters fair, though I personally feel this type of story would work much better as a Pride Lands origin story before Simba. But ok. I’ll see where this goes.
Hope my insight makes sense and helps.
11/11/2019 c9 Guest
Why are Kiara and Rani so mean. I honestly an not liking how things are going.
Why are Kiara and Rani so mean. I honestly an not liking how things are going.
11/10/2019 c9 CandyLuv99
At this point, I’m hating Kion, Rani, and Kiara even more...they think what they’re doing is right but those were their friends who they banished and if that’s how they treat their friends, they deserve any bad stuff that will happen to them
At this point, I’m hating Kion, Rani, and Kiara even more...they think what they’re doing is right but those were their friends who they banished and if that’s how they treat their friends, they deserve any bad stuff that will happen to them