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5/14 c3 Guest
Yo dude are you ever gonna finish this?
2/6 c3 Guest
Sorry guys but the author died last june due to covid. RIP.
1/18 c1 Guest
RIP
7/2/2020 c3 Guest
Plz update
6/26/2020 c3 Guest
You've nailed the characters!
6/23/2020 c3 Guest
When will you be posting next? Great story!
6/13/2020 c3 Guest
How the hell is this story not popular?! This is good shit!
5/19/2020 c3 Guest
I'm honestly quite jealous. Your writing is really good. Not super informative nor boring or relying on base plot but very well balanced. The story seems very well made indicating a lot of effort put into it.
4/30/2020 c3 Guest
This is very good writing. I mean really,this may be one of the best fanfics I've seen here. Great work!
4/30/2020 c3 Guest
Iur saviour has returned!
4/14/2020 c3 4The Pairing Guy
Hey, a very tantalizing idea for a fic, and you back it up with a great handling of Haruhi/Kyon. Even as a happily married couple, their relationship is fraught with difficult, often painful struggles that have nothing to do with Haruhi's power or the aliens, espers, and time travelers interested in her. I often feel sorry for both of them, and fear that their relationship may in fact be unable to weather what's coming, but at the same time feel their relationship is precious and worth saving. That makes great tension.

Kyon's job situation, for instance, is a great example of how, regardless of how scatterbrained she appears on the surface, Haruhi gives Kyon the push and direction he needs to be practical and useful. Without her, he would always settle for a tiny fraction of what he's capable of. In turn, you get the sense that without him, she'd only be able to obsess over things. Only he can calm her enough to simply love someone, like in the last scene of chapter 2. What's great is I don't even realize how you're using these scenes to illustrate their relationship while I'm reading, only afterwards.

I love how you throw all these teasers of Haruhi and Kyon's past into your fics without offering explanation. What was it that Haruhi did to make their honeymoon such an ordeal? Why did Kyon get so upset when he proposed? Stuff like that sparks the imagination and makes us feel like there's more to the characters than just what's in the story.

Chapter 3 is a bit choppy and honestly seems like a detour from the main plot, but I guess I won't know whether that is in fact the case until I've read the whole fic. Here's hoping you finish it!
4/10/2020 c3 53Martin III
Dang, it seems I just wrote a review covering why 1st person with multiple perspectives doesn't work (in fact, it was over two months ago). You've managed to keep it from being confusing, but I'm not sure Haruhi's POV serves a real purpose here. All the content is already made clear through Kyon's POV, with the sole exception of her suspicions of infidelity, and I suspect that could have waited until Kyon learned of them. It doesn't seem like they could have any impact anyway, since Kyon is about to share with her the much more crucial point of her powers, though I suppose something could happen to stop him.

You've completely nailed Haruhi's insecurity. She's confident in herself - in everything from her force of personality to her charm to her sexual prowess - but she's not confident in Kyon's love for her. He certainly gave her plenty of reason to doubt it during their high school years. Even though he has his reasons, his present lack of enthusiasm for her also gives her plenty of reason to doubt it. And she makes a valid observation with "I'm all he's ever had" - an incredibly cutting line. I believe that so long as Haruhi exists, Kyon would never want to marry anyone else, but he has expressed an attraction to practically every girl he's met, and while his lying to Haruhi to cover up his encounters with other girls demonstrates that she's the one he wants to keep, it also demonstrates his capacity to be unfaithful behind her back. Small wonder that a single covert phone call could make her suspect him of having an affair.

I also noticed that for all her reasoning that she has no proof of infidelity, she never contemplates the difficulty of proving a negative. As much as she wants to have faith in Kyon, she is tragically resigned that he has cheated on her. All of this makes it hard to completely hate having Haruhi's POV in this chapter. :)

There are a number of points that confused me:

1) "What did it all mean? What was all that about? Why did I see Haruhi like that?" I would have assumed that Kyon never told us what he remembered of the dream because the details aren't relevant, but these questions reveal that the details are actually being withheld from the reader. I know that Tanigawa made the same gaffe in The Disappearance, but you shouldn't draw attention to the fact that you're withholding the perspective character's knowledge. It pulls the reader out of the story, especially in first person, since the entire conceit is that the reader is inside the character's head.

2) "What kind of person am I becoming?" It's not clear what Kyon's train of thought here is. The prose seems to indicate that he didn't have time to put the pieces back, and even if he did, wasn't that just a one-off mistake?

3) I imagine that "I can barely look at him right dare you Kyon!" was intended to show that Haruhi is so upset she can't think straight, but it doesn't feel natural. It's only the second sentence of the segment, and in the first sentence she sounds totally calm, so my initial impression was that it was a typo; I only realized your likely intent after trying and failing to work backwards to a grammatically correct sentence.

The strength in this fic continues to be the honest portrayal of Kyon and Haruhi's relationship with both its strengths and weaknesses. Even though he loves her, he doesn't have the stamina to show her all the love that her vulnerable heart demands. And maybe because of that, it's believable and sympathetic that she doesn't open up to him completely.
3/26/2020 c2 Guest
This is seriously good. I just read it and I'm already interested in how it goes. Hope you update soon.
2/25/2020 c2 MrOCD
I really enjoyed reading this and hope you continue with it. The only criticism I have regards the use of “her and I” near the end of the chapter. Because it’s not the object, it should be “she and I.” Just a minor nit to pick. Looking forward to reading more!
12/10/2019 c1 Guest
Plz more...
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