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11/26/2020 c1 13Nvrmore
I like it!

Fun. And funny ending! Hahaha
5/25/2020 c1 WolfhoundLove1
Such a fun story with the drama. A really nice balance. I love the gift Nate gave to Eliot. Perfect though I do hope they're organic. LOL
I hope more people find this series. I'll spread the word where I can. Thank you
4/26/2020 c1 Guest
Very Nate! and of course Parker and Hardison would tell them.
4/12/2020 c1 10HonestBee
I like the light-hearted ending to this story. The team would definitely do something like that!

This story is really good for your first, though I feel it could have been expanded upon, maybe even made into a multi-chapter. It feels a bit rushed. I say that only as constructive criticism. The plot was good, and I like the flashbacks to explain what happened to Eliot. There are just a few parts where I think it could have used more in-depth descriptions and maybe some more conversations rather than just narration.

There were also a couple parts early on where the tense changed to present tense that I found a bit jarring, and a few minor spelling errors. Again, all meant constructively.

You did get the characterizations down well. I can totally see Parker not being as surprised as a regular person might be at finding out her friend was a werewolf. Eliot had the right mix of irritation and anger and loyalty to/protectiveness of his friends. I think Hardison might have taken a little longer to accept the reality, even though he saw it with his own eyes.

One other thing I'd like to see is more explanation of Eliot's change into the wolf. As in, can he change at will, or was what happened in the warehouse somehow forced on him because of his injuries? I wasn't a hundred percent clear on that. Is it very painful for him to change, or could he do it at will with no ill effects? I can see so many times where that may come in handy during a case, or just because one of the team begs him to.

All in all though, good job!

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