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12/24/2020 c7 1Untitleduck
Oh shit Moni found out
12/17/2020 c7 ultragreenyellow56
Well, things just got awkward... and frightening, hopefully Monika will be able to help Sayori with her depression before things get even worse
9/13/2020 c5 toolazytologin
Wow! I love this so far! The details and the emotion is really cool, I actually find myself getting genuinely angry at Monika's parents for making her feel so bad. Please, keep writing this!
8/3/2020 c4 1Michael James
Read your first 4 chapters and now i'm hooked. Good length to each chapter, everyone feels in-character and the expansion on Monika's stress that was only lightly touched upon in the game are great. Interested to see more of Monika's interactions with her parents or even flashbacks to time spent with Minori.
Can't wait for the next chapter despite the last one only being 3 hours old as of this review :p
Keep up the good work
7/21/2020 c3 Guest
I really love these ‘Monika has issues aside from being code’ stories. I hope you continue this.
7/2/2020 c3 Guest
Please continue writing! I love this story!
5/4/2020 c3 59terrietont
This is so cute! The way you write their interactions makes my own feeble heart flutter. I found myself actually getting angry at Monika’s parents as if they were real people for a moment there, like how dare they compare their daughters like that!
4/12/2020 c3 Rung69
Another great chapter. Love this so far
4/10/2020 c2 Rung69
Love this so much great writing imo
4/9/2020 c1 Guest
Great potential! DDLC isn't dead yet. Please keep going!
4/9/2020 c1 Guest
Best fic in a long while! A lot of potential! Please keep going!
4/8/2020 c1 karimalibhai123
So I thought I should get round to leaving my review instead of just thinking of how much potential this fic has. Firstly ddlc may seem dead, but it still has an active community and new fics going up all the time, so don't worry about that.

Secondly, sayori is my favourite doki and monika second, so if there is seemingly any bias hopefully this puts it into context!

Thirdly, I very much like the concept you have so far. The writing quality is high which is nice to see, lots of stories in here don't have the best grammar lol. I think exploring monika being stressed and actually needing sayori as much as sayori (may) end up needing her is quite unique as a lot of writers sometimes miss how much people rely on sayori as well. Obviously at some point you'll probably need to tackle sayori's depression. I wish you luck and I'd be happy to private message you some advice, I'd imagine you can guess where said advice comes from ehehe.

Fourthly, a little criticism is that you may want to experiment with changing points of view, imo the first chapter would have done well to be from monika's pov but it's up to you in the end. I think it may help to experiment though, maybe switch it up from time to time. So long as you make it clear whose pov it is, if and when you change!

Finally, keep on writing and don't give up. This is one of the higher quality works I've found on this site for a while, plus it's great. So yeah, in short keep it up and thanks for writing.

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