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6/25/2020 c4 7TheBrassyLassy
Kirbo's angery now. I always pictured him turning red when he got angry...anyway, great chapter! I'll try and give some constructive criticism because I want to be helpful but like...this was a solid chapter. There really isn't anything to critique. A few sentences transition a little roughly, like "Their bug-catching equipment bobbed in the air in their grip. The miscellaneous insects' cries droned on in the air." I just think the repetition of the word "air" makes it sounds a little off, and "sky" could have been used in one's place. But I really don't know, I think your writing is great! Keep up the good work!
6/21/2020 c3 TheBrassyLassy
Bandana Deeeee! Only topped by Parasol Dee. Great chapter, I can't wait for more! :)
6/19/2020 c2 TheBrassyLassy
Having just re-played Super Star Ultra, I appreciated the Halberd making an appearance. When my brother played SSU when I was really little, I was so sad when you had to destroy it because I thought it was really cool.

And I think that you're writing is great! There are a few grammatical errors, I think. I'm not too sure because grammar is not my strong suit, but on the flip side, I'm also not bothered by grammar mistakes because I can hardly recognize if they are mistakes. But you're writing has definitely improved a lot, and it's really fun to read!
6/19/2020 c1 TheBrassyLassy
:D cuteness! And frankly I agree with Kirby, Meta Knight has no reason to want to wear a mask. I think his face is adorable. Good chapter!

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