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4/18 c11 Stranger853
Noice chapter dude!
2/19 c11 lilbigstoryteller
Good chapter, though I still don't really like the Ocs. The characters you've placed in this story (besides Jaden) don't really sit right with me, but that might be because I know the main cast better than I do the Ocs. Unless you've planned this already, try to do what you can to give each of these characters proper development (more so than the main cast).
1/20 c9 Guest
: ) This is perfect! All the plot twists that you've done so far, from Laura Bodewig getting seriously injured (to the point of almost dying) to Ichika and Jaden getting suspended from ISA for two weeks, were genius. Also, I'm happy to hear that you are taking a different direction by having Ichika (the "brain dead idiot" in the official canon) and Jaden go through some changes in their personalities. Hopefully, these developments will allow the boys to continue standing up to the girls' abusements in the future. It was just annoying and stupid for Ichika in the anime canon to just take the pain and let those girls get away scot-free. That's not funny, it's just messed up.

In addition, I hope Keith Wilson would be a great assistant/friend by understanding what happened before he got here and helping those boys earn everyone's forgiveness.
1/19 c9 Guest
: ) Dude, this is perfect! The fact that you went in a different direction instead of exactly following the anime took me by surprise. Also, I'm happy to learn that Ichika (known as the "brain dead idiot" in the Infinite Stratos canon) and Jaden will be having their personalities evolved.
1/21 c10 lilbigstoryteller
I think that your adding too many ocs to this story. This story would have been fine with just Jaden.
1/21 c9 lilbigstoryteller
Amazing, you're really doing your own thing. A lot of infinite stratos fics just have the original story but with minor change.
1/13 c3 Irbis
USSR x USA
7/20/2020 c7 3Matsuda Macober
I have a Question... Why Chifuyu and Ta and are so strong? They have Nano machines or something like that? Or they are only the ultimate Human form? Or something like that...?
6/7/2020 c3 2Xenowishes
Happy to see you're continuing this. So far the story continues to follow the IS route.

Once again however, there are still multiple grammar issues. Words spelled incorrectly, punctuation missing at the end of sentences, and sentences that don't make any sense. Even the last few chapters haven't been fixed yet. It doesn't seem like much but these errors do add up and they will deter people away from your story.

And thank you for the shoutout, i'm happy to hear you like my work. I'd love to hear your thoughts on it.
5/17/2020 c1 4uselessman
Just a question? This power of jayden is kind like mutant power?
Will itu kind of enchanted his is like ghost rider power?
Btw for now i keep my eye on this.
5/17/2020 c1 2Xenowishes
The main character seems unique with those unnatural abilities of him, though if this guy can break the sound barrier on his own, and beat an IS with his abilities, then I look forward to seeing what can challenge him.

The biggest Issue I have with this story is the grammar. Every sentence doesn't have a period at the end, there are capital letters where there shouldn't be, numbers that should be spelled as words, and other mistakes that make reading this hard to enjoy. When you get a chance, you should read this over and fix those errors.
5/17/2020 c1 3franciskanneh007
Keep doing what you are doing

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