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8/18 c26 HeyThereMan
Hey, still reading the fanfiction here, first thing first i really like it over all except for a little things, like will first havimg a break down in the bathroom and then accepting it all at the museum, he either wasn't thinking straight or idk, doesnt seem to make much sense.
Apart from this this is really nice
8/14/2020 c22 Guest
! Danger Ahead!
Be careful everyone!
6/30/2020 c20 2write n wrong
great chapter, something strange is going on and when the gang learns what it is, something tells me none of them are going to like it, maybe tartar isn't gone after all, keep up the good work :)
6/23/2020 c19 write n wrong
the mystery deepens, can't wait for more, keep it up :)
6/5/2020 c17 write n wrong
great chapter, I figured the museum would unnerve will a bit, wait until inkopolis learns humans are still around, looking forward to more chapters :)
5/23/2020 c16 write n wrong
great chapter, so mira discovered we humans are ink proof and water proof, wonder how the others will react to that, keep up the good work :)
5/10/2020 c5 7ancientdragonduelist
Ok, that was really freaking adorable.

Pearl trying to destroy him, and he’s like... “Guys? Help?)
2/20/2020 c14 Guest
Lia should get her head out of her ass concerning Will, cause I believe that he had NO CONNECTION to the Kamabo mess, just as Marie needs to get her head out of her ass about the Octolings, no matter what happened to Callie. It's not worth having a grudge over. That also includes Pearl as well, she can get her head out of her ass. As for Devon, all I can say is she needs to get along with Will, cause if she thought that human female was bad, making Will her enemy would NOT be a good idea.
1/23/2020 c13 4ZygardeFusion
Well, I finally got around to reading this story (and by that, I mean I snuck it in class), and I think that it’s great so far! Just a few suggestions:

1) Could you write some bios on the characters, like who they are, aliases (if they’re agents), their age, and all that other jazz?

2) Add a bit more length to chapters? Readers generally prefer reading bigger chapters, from what I’ve seen.

3) Get a beta reader? I noticed a few errors/typos, and I’m willing to beta read (look over your stuff before it’s published). Just shoot me a DM/PM and I’ll do it.

This story has potential, I can’t wait to see more of it!

Fight For All Fiction,
Zygarde
12/10/2019 c10 2write n wrong
great chapter, so agents 3 and 4 ran into the octoling whose squad got thrashed by the female human? if they take the octoling back, how will she react to the male human Will ? can't wait to find out, looking forward to the next chapter :)
11/23/2019 c8 write n wrong
great chapters, this story is awesome, so a group of octolings ran into a female human and got their tentacles kicked?, should have looked before they inked, can't wait for more chapters :)
11/8/2019 c5 ZED147
Please keep up this great story I can’t wait to see their reactions when they find out humans can’t be hurt buy ink! That will probly get Three’s attention... and a lot of fear. Also is there going to be a point where he has an actual weapon and shows them that we made our own power instead of useing a giant fish? Can’t wait for next chapter!
11/6/2019 c5 6ChiggerD
Alright, to start I would suggest adding more meat to your chapters. More detail in general can at least flesh them out a bit, as barely scratching 1k per chapter is usually not a good sign. There are a lot of errors and typos, some of which are rather confusing and off putting, and I suggest some proofing. While you are doing a decent job with canon chars and keeping them.. well in character, your OCs are pretty bland and samey so far. And constantly using their numbers over their names is never a good idea. While I assume most of these issues are the result of first fanfic, which is fine if that's the case, I still strongly suggest some revisions and thought into where to go from here since I can also sense some lack of direction.
11/3/2019 c5 Nitpicky Bastard
I'm pretty sure Inklings and Octos already know what pens are and do in fact use them on a regular basis since the Ballpoint Splatling exists. Plus they're about five feet tall and much stronger than most people think considering the size of the Ultra Stamp...

Y'know what? I don't even know why I'm complaining, this story's great. I'm loving it so far. Keep up the good work, man, this story has tons of potential.
10/25/2019 c3 2write n wrong
great chapter , not sure about how I would feel if I went to bed and woke face down in the dirt , I'd have questions and somebody better have answers , looking forward to the next chapter:)
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