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7/30 c23 H1s4a5
To start off, I'm also confused whether or not that review was positive or negative. Is the simp jack? Lol, ignore it because they haven't elaborated anything.

Next, this chapter was quite good. Even if it was slightly short, it was written in such a way that it felt like a long chapter and I had fun reading it, too. Poor Jack.

Up til now, the story is excellent. And welcome back, too! Hope you enjoyed your break! Other then that, I hope you get more positive reviews because your story is underrated IMO. Not many stories include an OC with magic, and with other characters like Grace it overall makes the story much more interesting. Keep it up!
4/28 c1 I move weight
get this fucking simp dead already
3/2 c21 elittesgamer
Thanks for the chapter
1/9 c20 8Artiikii
Welcome back!
Despite being short, i feel like you got a lot of information through and it doesn't feel rushed or awkwardly ended. As usual, the interactions felt very natural, I still commend you.
For shortening this down, you managed to find a great cliff hanger to end on, which I tend to have difficulty with often haha.
Keep up the good work, I can't wait to see the next chapter!
12/18/2020 c19 Artiikii
I'll just make a brief review here of the whole story first because reviewing every chapter when there are several already out isnt my style- (i'll dm you some specifics I'd like to point out)
First of all, you have a LOT of ambition. From reading the Author's Notes, you wanted to make this into a comic (as an artist, this still interests me), an animation and now a game. That takes a lot of learning/problem solving.
ANYWAY. This story so far has been really interesting. I've only really read one other UT fanfic and it was AU so seeing something so well done while having characters in character, in the environment where I'm used to imagining, while still being original is really fantastic.
I like the addition of giving each soul a personality and name (though I'm somewhat amused by Will and Grace, but it could be because my parents are older if you get my drift-) And I do enjoy what you did with Chara's backstory and the 'demons'. A few spelling issues here and there but that's unavoidable sometimes (though I do suggest, besides just relying on me/a betareader, to go over things with Grammarly).
I think that's all I'll say here, really good job overall! It feels like I'm Underground while reading it, I can picture almost everything as you/Jack describes it, which is a great immersion.
(ps, ironic tidbit; right after you dmed me and I started reading, I ended up (unconsciously) playing Undertale, yes, for the first time, on my stream because my drawing tablet wasn't working)
10/20/2020 c1 1Barc6117
Wait Chased a girl? *chuckles* I'm in danger
8/20/2020 c10 4RobinMur
And I'm back again! Again, sorry about the long delay where I was completely inactive.
Good scene there between Jack and Frisk. Interesting concept, with Frisk not being able to stop herself because of the hate. It fits really well with not being able to move in cutscenes or just walking though a lot of stuff in genocide.
Interesting fight there with the two other monsters.
And yeah Jack never told Frisk about the shield. Oh yeah.
Good chapter. It definitely caught up both Frisk and Jack on some stuff. It seems odd to me how Jack wasn't at all surprised by the whole 'barrier' thing and didn't seem too phased about Sans not caring, but I guess that Frisk changing the subject did make it flow way better.
8/14/2020 c13 YoungSorcerer23
I'm not real good on writing reviews, but I do wanna say that this story is REALLY good so far!
Keep it up!
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7/29/2020 c11 Elizebeth
This is amazing! I love it so much! Keep up the amazing work, and I kind of hope you make it into an animation. (but do what you want to do).
7/5/2020 c10 DIKR1229
Your time to shine is slowly coming to a start.
7/4/2020 c9 RobinMur
Ah, Chara, always there for any good protagonist when they need more emotional torture.
Okay, but seriously, that was an awesome chapter. I didn't notice anything that would need to be fixed, and it was absolutely fantastic. Sometimes shorter chapters work best since they can help build suspense about future important scenes without just having a bunch of unimportant filler, and this definitely worked well.
7/3/2020 c8 RobinMur
Wait, hold on, wasn't Frisk not able to say Gaster's name earlier? I might be getting that confused with something or someone else.
Oooooh, I like the bracelet thing. And the shield. They're cool ideas.
It seems like you're gonna have someone from each area (ruins, snowdin, waterfall, ect) go with Frisk and Jack to the next area. That isn't an idea I've seen much on here, so I think that'll be pretty interesting.
Another really cool chapter! I didn't notice anything in this one that should be fixed, so that's great!
7/2/2020 c7 RobinMur
I like how when you had Frisk realize what happened wasn't her fault, everyone but Jack seemed kinda confused.
Also it's great how Papyrus lit everything on fire.
The with Gaster trying to kill Jack was fantastic!
When a character gets mortally injured, remind the reader how much pain they're in. Saying it hurt a bunch feels like an understatement, because it seems like Jack just died.
Also, it's cool that Sans protected Jack. I like the idea of Gaster and Sans working together in the past, but against each other now.
6/30/2020 c6 RobinMur
The jukebox was playing All Star. Nice.
Oh. OH! Frisk went genocide, didn't she? I really like how you show more sides of Frisk the closer she gets to Jack. It helps depict her personality in a much more realistic way.
To me, it doesn't seem like you're shoving their relationship down my throat, it just seems like you're having the two of them bond as characters. You've actually got a pretty good balance about how much it's just them, and how much it's more people.
Another great chapter!
6/28/2020 c9 3Daverocks5941
Loving it so far! Keep up the awesome work!
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