2/18 c2 66Treskttn
"She thought about saving him. She chose not to."
Great literary device. I love some repetition. Once again, I think you're a phenomenal writer, very funny, and your timing is just great.
Thanks for sharing.
"She thought about saving him. She chose not to."
Great literary device. I love some repetition. Once again, I think you're a phenomenal writer, very funny, and your timing is just great.
Thanks for sharing.
2/18 c1 Treskttn
Hello. I just started Monster Hunter World for the first time, and during the game my friend and I joked about what kind of fanfiction could exist.
A joke, turned into a full on fandom. Well done, writer. This chapter had us rolling on the floor laughing. It's well written, the timing is amazing and perfect, the characters are real and relatable, your vocabulary is great, and your use of grammar is spot on.
I had to take the time to applaud you. You are funny and a great writer.
Thanks for sharing this.
Hello. I just started Monster Hunter World for the first time, and during the game my friend and I joked about what kind of fanfiction could exist.
A joke, turned into a full on fandom. Well done, writer. This chapter had us rolling on the floor laughing. It's well written, the timing is amazing and perfect, the characters are real and relatable, your vocabulary is great, and your use of grammar is spot on.
I had to take the time to applaud you. You are funny and a great writer.
Thanks for sharing this.
1/11/2020 c8 517dragonboy
I had to reread the second team part to get what was going on, wasn't sure who Darwin was.
I like the doctor scene though, funny stuff.
I had to reread the second team part to get what was going on, wasn't sure who Darwin was.
I like the doctor scene though, funny stuff.
12/27/2019 c7 17dragonboy
Didn’t fully realize bird’s organs (and by extension, wyvern’s) worked like that… Interesting tying that into Monster Hunter, in a comedy no less.
Shot in the dark here, papa joins the fray, and/or cooked eggs or a hangover cure. :P
Didn’t fully realize bird’s organs (and by extension, wyvern’s) worked like that… Interesting tying that into Monster Hunter, in a comedy no less.
Shot in the dark here, papa joins the fray, and/or cooked eggs or a hangover cure. :P
12/22/2019 c4 17dragonboy
Funny stuff, the Goren slipping part in particular got me. It’s fun to watch less heroic or qualified characters do stuff.
There were a few instances were you switch to present tense, I’d watch out for that. (Wishes he was assigned… Cannot swim, so that’s out… Damage is sure to have broken the hull… It’s the middle of the night.) Also a typo “Was that avolcano.”
But yeah, good stuff.
Funny stuff, the Goren slipping part in particular got me. It’s fun to watch less heroic or qualified characters do stuff.
There were a few instances were you switch to present tense, I’d watch out for that. (Wishes he was assigned… Cannot swim, so that’s out… Damage is sure to have broken the hull… It’s the middle of the night.) Also a typo “Was that avolcano.”
But yeah, good stuff.