1/9/2020 c1 2Vallalkozo
So you decided to try again. At least you replaced the stone with a bracelet and dagger, but this first chapter is still rushed. Try to flesh things out a bit more. Also, I hope Aurora will actually contribute something to the story, as in that her being there causes certain events from the movie to play out differently. If everything remains the same, she is nothing more than a bystander.
So you decided to try again. At least you replaced the stone with a bracelet and dagger, but this first chapter is still rushed. Try to flesh things out a bit more. Also, I hope Aurora will actually contribute something to the story, as in that her being there causes certain events from the movie to play out differently. If everything remains the same, she is nothing more than a bystander.