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4/27/2020 c11 Guest
Hi, nice job to you and DarthTenebrus, I hope you are wll and keep writing these stories. I'm actually writing two or three but want to focus only in two: an alien prequel and a predator story which was a challenge by another user. If you wan't to bera read, let me know. I'll send you the prologue.
As for the atory, it was nice to close the cycle with Ripley's added report from Alien Isolation: Not alone.
4/26/2020 c12 10DarthTenebrus
Nice. Next one needs to be Alien3. There's an inmate at the Fiorina 161 prison named Dillon, and maybe it was his daughter on LV426 that got killed at Hadley's Hope before the Marines got there. Now, since this is a Not Alone version, all but Newt and Bishop have to survive...Mils, Stone, Hudson, Vasquez, Hicks and Ripley. Otherwise the plot should be the same. Now it's just a matter of seeing if you want Ripley to survive implantation by that Royal Facehugger, whether surgically or otherwise.

Can't wait.
4/26/2020 c12 12Tiger2014
Awesome, dude! Really awesome! So, are you gonna do Alien 3 next? And Aliens: Colonial Marines? The series must go on.
4/26/2020 c12 Guest DCDGojira
To author
Awesome chapter! Also Dark Horse comic is releasing a comic based on the original script of the movie when it comes out, you may want to based a story on it.
4/23/2020 c11 Guest DCDGojira
To author
Good luck. You're going to need it.
3/24/2020 c10 7alphalima1980
Great job! I liked the addition of David and Walter. Ash was always intriguing, what he thinks or "collates"? In the novelization Ash last advice to Ripley, Parker and Lambert was "Had you tried to comunicate with it?" and Ripley responded "Did you?" and Ash said "Allow me to take some secrets to the tomb", implying the alien was in fact intelligent and Ash had comunicated with it.
Lambert's fate is left the same as the movie, just groans and screams but is implied the alien raped her, glad not to read the explicit scene...
I'm looking forward the conclussion and maybe we can write a good prequel. I had some ideas.
3/23/2020 c10 10DarthTenebrus
Excellent as always. A credit to your storytelling and my and AlphaLima1980 editing. Let's bring it on in for the big conclusion.
3/23/2020 c9 DarthTenebrus
What did you think about this latest chapter as you posted it?
2/24/2020 c8 DarthTenebrus
Perfect ending to the chapter, I felt like I was watching the film again.
2/6/2020 c7 DarthTenebrus
A couple of grammar and punctuation issues here, but again, that's my bad so no worries. In the run-up to Brett's demise a description of the alien while it was still perched among the chains could have been less specific - Brett could have looked up and seen maybe a black shadow or something, and with all the condensation and water dripping down it would have obscured his vision even more. Remember, we, the readers, are supposed to be seeing things from the characters' point of view, not ours. We're supposed to be the extra character, the impartial, intangible observer, and we're supposed to be looking at the plot of the story as if we were there with the characters. This is the beauty of reading fiction, the ability to immerse oneself in the characters' world. As writers, it's our job to make the readers believe that they are there in the story alongside the characters, so make us believe. We want the jump scares, and we want the ongoing fear for the characters as they struggle against the deadly beast while it stalks them mercilessly.

I'm going to end it here at the risk of rambling, so I'll just wish you good luck and improvement in your upcoming chapters. Remember, stick to past tense in the narrative.
2/6/2020 c7 7alphalima1980
I definetely loved the changes you made, first the re-telling of the deleted airlock sequence using elements from Alien: Isolation, then by having Mils captured by the alien.
It was a smart move giving Mils survivor's guilt because he was on every significant event from the movie, and his relationships with the rest of the crew were friendly, it's logic to him feeling guilt over Kane's and Brett's deaths.
1/17/2020 c5 12Tiger2014
Awesome chapter. And romance is already onto Andrew and Ripley. And then on the next chapter, they'll be seeing a horrible surprise of Kane.I hope Andrew has a lot courage in him than a lot of fear.
1/7/2020 c5 Guest DCDGojira
To author
Are you going to do a third Alien 3 Not Alone based on the Gibson script/comic?
1/6/2020 c5 10DarthTenebrus
Well, a couple of spelling and punctuation issues aside, which are my bad, so don't worry about it, this looks beautiful. Perfect stopping point, too. As with all horror fiction, less is more, because our greatest fear is that of the unknown and the unknowable.

Keep it up!
1/5/2020 c5 Guest
Great job man. I'm glad you included some of my dialog, and the reference to Alien: the play, by the North Bergen Highschool which was awesome.
Looking for the next chapter, and Big Chap
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