5/9 c63 Guest
Cranky cursed at the puppets and I give this grumpy monkey a thumbs up to that. And way to go with a reference to Donkey Kong cartoon!
Cranky cursed at the puppets and I give this grumpy monkey a thumbs up to that. And way to go with a reference to Donkey Kong cartoon!
5/2 c62 Guest
I liked Cranky's part in this chapter. He's right.
I liked Cranky's part in this chapter. He's right.
4/21/2020 c22 ElysiumXVI
Okay, Salamence? I’m relatively sure this one was just a joke, but the Fates bashing is starting to legitimately annoy me. God, I feel bad for Corrin if he shows up...
Okay, Salamence? I’m relatively sure this one was just a joke, but the Fates bashing is starting to legitimately annoy me. God, I feel bad for Corrin if he shows up...
4/16/2020 c20 ElysiumXVI
...he lost his mind from a freakin’ DEMOTION?!
Okay, I’m pretty sure Scorn had underlying mental issues already. You can’t go from “sane” to “crazy” from just a demotion!
...he lost his mind from a freakin’ DEMOTION?!
Okay, I’m pretty sure Scorn had underlying mental issues already. You can’t go from “sane” to “crazy” from just a demotion!
3/31/2020 c15 ElysiumXVI
So far, the most interesting character in this whole story is Viper. I’d say he’s also the most likable, but I haven’t seen enough of anyone else’s personalities to make that decision.
So far, the most interesting character in this whole story is Viper. I’d say he’s also the most likable, but I haven’t seen enough of anyone else’s personalities to make that decision.
3/27/2020 c14 ElysiumXVI
I— Whuh— But—
Christ, Lucina, he was just doing his job! Not everyone working for an evil empire is evil!
I— Whuh— But—
Christ, Lucina, he was just doing his job! Not everyone working for an evil empire is evil!
2/8/2020 c2 sleepymonster
Great descriptions and introduction of characters. Story flowed well chronologically, however progression of the story is slightly slow. Could have more events happening in 1 chapter. Still a good piece of fan fict though! Keep it up buddy!
Great descriptions and introduction of characters. Story flowed well chronologically, however progression of the story is slightly slow. Could have more events happening in 1 chapter. Still a good piece of fan fict though! Keep it up buddy!
2/1/2020 c2 Elysium16
Well, for one thing, we all read the previous chapter, so we didn't need the recap at the start of Lucina’s section.
Try to cut down on the run-on sentences, too.
Well, for one thing, we all read the previous chapter, so we didn't need the recap at the start of Lucina’s section.
Try to cut down on the run-on sentences, too.
1/31/2020 c1 5Needs a better username
I liked this. It has a good start and I'm curious as to where it will go in the future. Keep up the good work.
I liked this. It has a good start and I'm curious as to where it will go in the future. Keep up the good work.