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10/31/2020 c42 42Annastesia LaFayette
So happy that Jon and Malcolm have been absolved of any wrongdoing.

I am concerned for Malcolm's mental state. Will the Jaguar once again be caged or will he seek out his pound of flesh? Hopefully Holly can help soothe the breast within.

Love Trip's declaration to his wife. I think it made her see the better side of this mess and gave her something to hold onto while she tries to adjust to her new life and accept that while one part comes to an end, another is beginning.

The conversation with V'Las...this obviously isn't over by a long shot.

Kudos.
10/29/2020 c33 Annastesia LaFayette
So I've gotten very behind in my reading.

My heart broke for T'Pol in this chapter, having to see herself for the first time deranged and out of control. Yikes!
10/19/2020 c1 14entallat
Wow! Now that's a hell of an intro.
Finally I have a chance to settle in with this story! Looking forward to it.
10/12/2020 c42 imzadi66642
Nice story. It was a pleasure reading it. Thank you!
10/9/2020 c42 3Hedera
We cannot thank you enough for this thrilling (and in the end also heartwarming) story! Your writing is incredible, there's not one dull sentence to be found, and you do everything so well: The action, the characters and their motivation, the feelings... I could go on and on! I just loved the tentative happy endings that Malcolm/Holly and Trip/T'Pol can hope for now, and Jon too, with Enterprise soon setting out again. I sincerely hope we sooner or later get to read another story from you, preferably sooner of course...
10/5/2020 c42 Ken
Loved the ending. You portrayed Malcom's reaction to being free perfectly after all he had been through. Of course, it was great to see Trip and T'Pol work things out at the end of such a horrible experience.

Thanks for a truly wonderful story.
10/5/2020 c42 Guest
Excellent, excellent. excellent. You should have written every book after the Romulan War!
10/7/2020 c42 10bri wesmoreland
Wonderful story, exceptional characterization and so very well written. I look forward to the sequel!
10/7/2020 c41 bri wesmoreland
Very nice!
10/7/2020 c40 bri wesmoreland
It was very gracious of Jon and Malcolm to forgive T'Pol so quickly and allow her back in their company so quickly.
10/7/2020 c38 bri wesmoreland
Nice try S'Hella.
10/5/2020 c39 maj229
Thank you for another fascinating and professionally written story (You, and a few other Enterprise writers are in an entirely different category of writing; you’re at the professional level) of an aspect of Enterprise I don’t believe has ever been addressed fully - The destruction of Seleya and it’s consequences.

Season 3 is ripe with questionable conduct by Archer and crew, from torture and abuse of a prisoner, to theft of a warp coil, to the destruction of the Seleya to name a few. The consequences of which have never been as fully explored with such insight into the characters who are affected by Archer’s decision, including Archer himself, and the legal consequences for those actions, as you have done here.

You deftly take us from hero worship for Archer and crew for the success of their mission to save Earth, with even Ambassador Soval thanking him, to the consequences for the actions they took to do it. The screws being tightened on the one vulnerable member of the crew again, T’Pol, being forced to choose between saving her mother again and her loyalty to the crew, just as she was forced to choose between Trip and marrying Koss to save her mother.

The courtroom drama was spot on. Having been a lawyer for 43 years (and in the military for 36 years, though not as a lawyer), I’ve tried a lot of cases, jury and court trials, both criminal and civil. You’re depiction of the Article 32 hearing is correct (It’s similar to a felony preliminary hearing in the civilian world), as is the conduct of the hearing itself, the objections, and the rulings. Cross-examination is often called the “greatest legal engine ever invented for the discovery of truth.” California v. Green, 399 U.S. 149, 158 (1970) And it is. It is also one of the most difficult skills to learn as a new lawyer. You learn as you try cases.

Any criticism of what you have written about the courtroom process is baseless. Any question that contains the word “apparently” would be objected to on the grounds of foundation, speculation and conclusion. “Apparently” assumes knowledge as to the why and how the Vaankara was destroyed, without any evidence of how it was destroyed. Without a showing of the foundational facts, i.e., the Vaankara was self-destroyed by the actions of the crew, the question is objectionable, as stated above. Since the crew didn’t survive, the foundation cannot be overcome.

The same is true regarding questions of Vulcan law. Without foundational questions regarding Vulcan law, and T’Pol‘s knowledge of it, she is not the proper witness (you would need an expert witness on Vulcan Law) any answer she would give would be subject to the same objection as to foundation and speculation.

In addition, since we don’t know how the Vaankara was destroyed, any opinion by T’Pol as to it being destroyed by the crew pursuant to Vulcan law is itself speculation, and not admissible.

As a pointer to all the would be lawyers out there, speaking objections will get you a rebuke from the judge faster than you can make the objection. The only time an attorney will say more than just the objection, e.g., “hearsay” or “speculation” or “foundation,” is when it appears the Court doesn’t understand why the objection is applicable and should be sustained. Then, the Court will inquire of the attorney.

Bri Wesmoreland’s comments on the hearing are spot on.
10/5/2020 c39 3Hedera
Not only the storyline, also the number of chapters you post each time is great - I very much enjoyed to see the court proceedings through Jon's and Malcolm's eyes at the same time. Well, it seems the court battle is already over and won, not without collateral damage, but still... It really makes you wonder (as the protagonists did) what the vulcans really planned all along and if Starfleets officials or not so officials still can do something against it...
10/4/2020 c39 Philnick
Cross examination:

"Sub-Commander, before the Enterprise undertook its rescue effort for the Seleya, another Vulcan ship, the Vaankara had gone looking for the Seleya - and apparently had self-destructed after sending images of insane barbaric conduct by its crew against each other.

Was the self-destruction by the Vaankara a violation of Vulcan law?"

"No - it was in pursuance of Vulcan law."

"Why would that have been?"

"To prevent the Seleya's advanced technology from falling into the hands of another race."

"What would the Vulcan High Command have told the Enterprise to do about the Seleya if it could have been contacted?"

"Objection - the witness is being asked to speculate!"
10/1/2020 c32 Ken
Section 31 sending a message... Well, I love the fact that Trip might be able to get that message to T'Pol through the bond.
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