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11h c4 SuperWonderStan
An aptly named chapter indeed. Looking forward to the next update.
12/25 c4 ManOfSteel
Damn, he’s showcasing part of his powers very early on. A very entertaining read.
Can’t wait for more!
12/23 c4 Luke5921
ANother great chapter, very interested to see where this goes and how Kal handles being the only boy on the island
11/10 c3 SuperWonderStan
With the disclaimer of things becoming horrifictragic, I'm curious as to how this story will be a K rating. Nonetheless, this story has captured my interest and I'm curious to see where it goes.
11/10 c1 SuperWonderStan
Intrigued. Looking forward to what is coming.
11/7 c3 ManOfSteel
A chapter including very detailed descriptions, I like it.
My suggestion for the next chapter would be to divide it into several sections describing Kal growing up on the island at different points in time. Maybe 5 years, 10 years, 15 years, whenever something of importance happens.
11/6 c3 Guest
Good story but it’s a pity it’s only rated K
11/6 c3 151Qoheleth
Dear Dragonasaurus:

Yes, I can fairly say that these two chapters did answer my original question. However, in the process, they also raised a few new ones, the foremost being: Where was the Green Lantern Corps while Krypton was doing all this galactic conquest? I have to believe that the emergence of a new galactic imperial power that considered itself fully justified in crushing, enslaving, and occasionally eating members of other races would raise an eyebrow or two on Oa.

And, speaking of Kryptonian cannibalism, I gather that that whole business of grafting other races' powers into Kryptonian genomes is the exclusive source of Superman's powers in this version, and that Earth's yellow sun will play no particular role. (Which means no Kryptonite either, I suppose. Bit of a pity, that.) Now, leaving aside the fascinating complications this suggests for the Kryptonian Empire (so did the Kryptonians on different worlds have different arrays of superpowers, according to the particular combination of races their specific forebears had assimilated?), and leaving aside also the obvious point that, by all scientific and mythopoeic logic, a person whose inherited superpowers were derived that way ought to look like one of the nastier demons in the Vedas instead of like the Man of Tomorrow, I would just like to lodge a protest against your giving Diana, in such a story, the nickname "Little Sunlight". I mean, if you feel a need to darken the original, fine, but must you then remind us of the nicer version quite so blatantly?

To shift focus a bit, you really need to consider finding a decent proof-reader; your shaky command of the English language is a real barrier to full immersion. I don't just mean the big, obvious bloopers, such as the descriptions of Krypto as a "Caine" (a relative of Michael, perhaps?) or of Epione as "standing closets to the pod" - or, supremely, the denotation of the first chapter (or second, depending on whether one believes the text or the drop-down menu) as "Devine Interventions", as though this plot was being set in motion, not by Hera, but by Lord Feverstone from the Deep Heaven novels. No, it's the little stuff - your persistent confusion of "there" with "their" and "they're", your odd habit of putting closing punctuation outside of quotation marks, your blithe indifference to plural possessives, your apparently unshakable belief that "women" is singular - that really gets a reader down. (And, while on the subject of spelling: am I correct in thinking that the last vowel in Phillippus's name is meant to be an upsilon? Because, if so, you really ought to render it as "Phillippys"; putting an "-us" at the end of a name makes it look quite intolerably masculine.)

There are also a couple larger confusions that make for awkward reading in one or two places. For example, ambrosia is a solid food; the *liquor* of the gods is called nectar. And, while I have no objection to Phillipp[y]s being black (though it is a bit of a cliché, isn't it?), I feel obliged to point out that, since she lives on Themyscira, she cannot possibly be African-*American*.

Finally, one point I cannot in good conscience forbear to address: When you refer in chapter 2 to Hellenic religion giving way to "false faiths and other ridicules [sic] religions", is that supposed to be Hera's commentary, or your own? If the former, you'll want to edit it a bit to make that clearer, since for the most part your third-person narration seems to be pretty uniformly omniscient, and a sudden drop into close third like that ought to be set off more visibly. If the latter, on the other hand, may I hint that such superfluous cheap shots ought to have more narrative justification than this one does?

Sincerely,
Qoheleth
11/5 c3 Luke5921
another great chapter I can't wait to see what comes next. I think everyone's reaction was very accurate and realistic.

I think I would like to see Kal as a young boy, being raised around his sister and trained amongst an island of warrior women. So between the ages 5 and 10 is my vote
11/5 c3 cabrera1234
want to read the adventures of children Diana and Clark wonder what his amazon name will be? next the teens years and finally the adult years. will they still be wonder woman and superman when they go man world and meet the justice league?
11/5 c2 Joel
Heck, what an exciting chapter. I never thought I would get too excited, it really fascinates me.
about age in the next chapter. I wish Kal was five, it would be nice to see him train or play with his new sister diana.
11/1 c3 HeartOfChaos13
My review to chapter 2 was my review to chapter 3 and this Is my review to chapter 2.

The chapter Is great.
11/1 c2 HeartOfChaos13
I think that this chapter Is amazing and I would like that the next chapter be about Kal El as an Infant.

I wonder what Diana will be like as a big sister.
10/30 c1 SuperWonderStan
Haven't read yet, but I am cautiously hitting the follow button as it contains two of my favorite DC characters.
10/16 c2 ManOfSteel
A great introduction chapter, can’t wait to see how the story progresses.
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