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12/14/2020 c3 3Ark Genesis
Your a great writer! This is a great story so far and great chapter!
12/14/2020 c3 1Thecactus1
Sweet chapter. There's some real good humor and warmth to the interactions in this chapter that I can't quite quantify, but that's a good thing. The interweaving of the plots is going really well, and that's a complex problem in telling a story! Anyways, I'm excited for the next chapter.
12/1/2020 c1 Guest
The chapter was charming, to be sure. Definitely a step up from Cake's Crumb in terms of "painting a picture". Low chaos scenarios will probably help develop that skill. You're right about changing the POV: It comes off a bit jarring. I think that has more to do with the fact that we start 3rd person than anything else. Looking forward to the next chapter!
12/2/2020 c1 15ArendAlphaEagle
No offense, but Ferb excitedly jubilating that he got Gretchen and wanting to show her appreciation so badly that he got extroverted for a moment... that's simply not who Ferb is. Ferb has a crush on one girl and one girl only, and that's Vanessa Doofenshmirtz, not Gretchen. The show already proves that Ferb likes Vanessa on a degree that Ferb acts differently than usual, such as getting distracted by her mere appearance and not focusing on getting the right blueprint in "I Scream, You Scream", or literally the entire episode of "Vanessassary Roughness". You can't tell me that Ferb loves Gretchen way more than he does Vanessa after those episodes, especially when the show never showed Ferb even liking Gretchen at all.

...Yeah, sorry about ranting. I'll admit, Ferbetchen is literally one of my least favorite ships ever, because to me, it doesn't make any sense: the two don't have any romantic chemistry in the show whatsoever, and Gretchen is such a flat character that swapping her out with another Fireside Girl (like Adyson) wouldn't make the pairing with Ferb any different, making me question why that particular ship is so popular in the first place.

That's not to say that you can't ship Ferbetchen, but most of the time, I see Ferbetchen shippers develop Gretchen's flat character instead of completely altering Ferb's. I feel like I'm completely missing a fanfic or two in which Ferb gives up on his crush on Vanessa, and realizes he has an even bigger one on Gretchen. I realize that this is following up after your last PnF fic in which it's heavily hinted at Ferbetchen, but that has the same problem of missing a previous story in which Ferb realizes he loves Gretchen, so again, it came out of absolutely nowhere there as well.

tl;dr: Ferb feels completely out of character here for having such a huge crush on Gretchen, since the show never backed up that ship, and the fact that you haven't made a fic in which Ferb changes his crush from Vanessa to Gretchen doesn't help.
11/30/2020 c1 asperman1
"I got Phineas! I got Phineas! And this time, it'll be even more meaningful since we're an item! I'll need to figure out the perfect gift for him!"

So this is in the same universe as Crumb Cake?

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