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12/17 c2 8Atreyu452
Again, good chapter! I think you captured a good sibling dynamic. (And hey, we all gotta add some context to the show, it only gave us so much). I do like the element of adding characters from other Mega Man canons in, as it gives you a lot more to work with (and the Archie comics gave us some great ones!)

Have you considered also posting on AO3? I've found I tend to get more reviews there.
11/27 c1 Atreyu452
I haven't nearly gotten through the original, but I think this is a really good rewrite! The level of detail and characterization you've added really does the story justice, and I feel like it flows a lot better. You've definitely grown as a writer, and it shows!

I like your take on Kalinka (I think we accidentally stumbled on the same idea, only this last week did I find your old story, I don't spend much time on .-.), and I think it'll be cool to see how her and Proto play out in this updated version! I also like the effort you put into characterizing the Robot Masters - they obviously have their own personalities, and it'll be cool to see where those will go.

If I have one note, it's about how to translate foreign language when writing in English. It's always tricky, but I lean toward only translating it if the meaning is unclear, and to do either so in text or save to the author's notes. Russian is particularly tricky, I've found, because the Romanization of Cyrillic is not always the same way. (For example, in the case in the story, I would write something like: "Kalinka knew the robots would understand 'go to hell' in Russian.") However, this is entirely my opinion and how you translate it is up to you!

Feel free to message me if you have questions or want feedback on a particular thing!

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