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5/31 c2 Lud
I really liked the story. It was a bit confusing to read it at first, but I liked it
4/25 c1 Guest
Meh
1/11 c1 ComplicatedYetSimple
It was a bit of a hurdle to read through since the writing style is vastly different from what I'm used to. I've read fics written in a similar fashion before, but they usually include quotation marks when someone speaks.
I'll disagree with the other reviewer, they just weren't paying attention. Using the key you left at the top, it is easy to tell who is speaking.
I found the swapped talents pretty accurate, and amusing.
But I'd really suggest using quotation makes, and leaving a space between commas "," and the next word.
"For example, like this."
12/20/2020 c1 1JustUsingARandomName
You've got a good idea here, although I'm certain it's been done before, but it is certainly interesting. To be completely honest, this was a trainwreck. You do not ever show who is talking, except for maybe once or twice, which makes this incredibly hard to follow. Some of the characters are acting like I would expect them to, even with the talent swap, but some of them are acting completely different, as if their personalities are just a byproduct of their talents, like Kirigiri for instance. I think this could be a good story, but if you don't actually lay it out in a way that could be understood, then it probably will be dropped by a lot of people before they they get to the end of the first chapter. Even if this is something you are just doing for leisure, if you are going to be posting this for people to read it should at least be made so that we can understand what is going on and who is talking. That is definitely my main issue, the fact that I could almost never tell who was talking. I at first thought that it was Toko who was the Moral Compass due to the stuttering in the line, and to be fair the characters names wouldn't actually be there since Makoto didn't know their names at that time, but afterwards when he did know their names, we should have been told who was speaking most of the time, but we weren't. Like I said, I think this could be a good story, but at this point it is not something worth reading if anyone wants to actually know what is happening in a scene.

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