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5/6 c12 Guest
That was a bit gay bro we only hug as a greeting. Remember.
4/3 c33 1Hiirule
honestly EdisonBine are the most adorable thing and I live for it.
3/28 c29 Cheazdoodles
Amazing once again
3/2 c32 Zyani
world name 'Creative' lol
2/26 c31 dshockley123
So that leaves mods on the table. That's nice, could make an arc of him exploring the other dimensions like the aether, twilight forest, betweenlands, midnight, cavern, atun, tropicraft, etc.
2/24 c30 cheazdoodles
honestly, Edison sounds terrifying. but wouldn't people know from experience that you shouldn't look at an endermens eyes?
2/24 c3 DarkSolaris57
Edison is an idiot. He didnt build a shelter cause he wanted to rush things. He keeps focusing on ending the game quickly. This is his life now. Completing the games objectives does not mean he goes home. I can only hope this nights events beats into his thick skull that boring is good. Adventures are closer to horror stories for heroes than fun.
2/21 c29 cheazdoodles
oOOoOH, Edison with that comeback!
2/17 c28 2Mr H Pickles
You've got some really nice ideas here. The whole mob-hybrid thing is an interesting concept. I like the characters so far as well, more so when Alysine stopped being unreasonably standoffish (though I definitely struggle to believe that there won't be a romantic element between Edison and Bine from what we've seen so far). There's some really original stuff going on here and I definitely want to find out who or what the god bloke in the void is.

One suggestion I have to improve readability would be to better show who is saying each dialogue line. While it's generally not a massive issue as it tends to be fairly evident who is speaking, if you put a character's reaction to a line of dialogue on a line below then it makes it clear that they didn't say it.
To use an example from your last chapter, the following interaction reads a little easier if you write is as such:
"It's not much, but we kind of got used to that. We would have let you stay in the guest room but it's next door to mine and Alysine's door and well, we wouldn't be able to sleep with you nearby so your bed is on the opposite side of the house where the bedrooms are."
I nodded as I made sure to be careful of where I am in the house at night so I didn't wake any of them on accident, I really didn't like doing that. Well, I won't be in this house at night for a while anyway so it's not that big of a deal.
"Thanks again," I replied.
He just gave me a smile and a pat on the shoulder before moving back over to the staircase before saying, "I'm going to talk to my parents for a bit... etc.

It's just a small change that I think really helps the reader out. Take my advice with a pinch of salt though because I am by no means an expert and of course you can do what you want with your story.
Otherwise a little proofreading could definitely be worth it as there's a few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there (the barbecue in chapter 26 being a personal favourite).

Keep at it though. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes and am very intrigued by the Central Hub and how that all works.
2/13 c1 Guest
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2/13 c27 cheazdoodles
if I were Edson, I would put wilfin back in her place
2/10 c26 OfLifeDeathAndAllBetween
Updates pog!
2/10 c26 cheazdoodles
YAS THIS STORY DIDENT END YAS YAS YAS
2/8 c25 cheazdoodles
Have fun on you well needed break, tho I would reccomend the same story just to keep building up the chapters and words
2/6 c24 cheazdoodles
Plz make something after they beat the dragon I dont want this story to end plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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