12/18 c1 1latestardi02
Uhhhh...
Well, Cinderella is dumb.
"Hey, my horrible stepmother has come to congratulate me. Oo, look. She brought drinks. *gulp* Oh my god, it's poisoned! I never saw THAT coming..."
I actually like the story a lot, kind of a combo of snow white and Cinderella. Clever idea.
I like the delivery as well. The writing is pretty good too.
Also, I was wondering if you could read my story, Kingdom of Ice. It would mean a lot to me.
Thanks :)
Uhhhh...
Well, Cinderella is dumb.
"Hey, my horrible stepmother has come to congratulate me. Oo, look. She brought drinks. *gulp* Oh my god, it's poisoned! I never saw THAT coming..."
I actually like the story a lot, kind of a combo of snow white and Cinderella. Clever idea.
I like the delivery as well. The writing is pretty good too.
Also, I was wondering if you could read my story, Kingdom of Ice. It would mean a lot to me.
Thanks :)
8/23 c1 Guest
Hi! I understand that English is not your first language and applaud your bravery in writing a story in English. I would suggest that you reach out for a Beta; they will help correct your grammatical errors; unfortunately, there are many in this story. Take care and good luck in your writing endeavors.
Hi! I understand that English is not your first language and applaud your bravery in writing a story in English. I would suggest that you reach out for a Beta; they will help correct your grammatical errors; unfortunately, there are many in this story. Take care and good luck in your writing endeavors.
8/23 c1 109ChibiDawn23
This was great! A bit of Cinderella with a dash of Sleeping Beauty, Snow White and even a bit of Beauty and the Beast :)
This was great! A bit of Cinderella with a dash of Sleeping Beauty, Snow White and even a bit of Beauty and the Beast :)
8/21 c1 53PrincessLove40
That is absolutely beautiful. I love it. You know, you are a really talented writer.
That is absolutely beautiful. I love it. You know, you are a really talented writer.