1/14 c1 Stranger45
Really interesting..please do continue... we didn't have time to know of tsu'tey point of view and I think she looks interesting but there was still to discrption of her yet ...please do continue the story dont forget about us!
Really interesting..please do continue... we didn't have time to know of tsu'tey point of view and I think she looks interesting but there was still to discrption of her yet ...please do continue the story dont forget about us!
11/9/2020 c1 2k+Hawki
-"...in na'vi, a language...
Should be "Na'vi," since languages are capitalized (curiously, you capitalize Na'vi later on, as the species name)
Apart from that, there's not much to say. Certainly it's paced well enough, and written well enough. The weird thing about it is that the story blurb gives context, whereas none of that context is reflected in the narrative itself. I can guess that Iza isn't really a standard avatar (in that she's apparently been operating by herself for a year), but if not for the blurb, I'd have little idea as to what was going on. That isn't good or bad in of itself (certainly a story doesn't have to lay all of its cards on the table from the outset), but still, it's noticable.
Admittedly, anytime Tsu'tey turns up in the presence of a female, I have to roll my eyes, but meh. Not a big shipper. I have no idea why so many are apparently infatuated with him.
Anyway, it's a decent start.
-"...in na'vi, a language...
Should be "Na'vi," since languages are capitalized (curiously, you capitalize Na'vi later on, as the species name)
Apart from that, there's not much to say. Certainly it's paced well enough, and written well enough. The weird thing about it is that the story blurb gives context, whereas none of that context is reflected in the narrative itself. I can guess that Iza isn't really a standard avatar (in that she's apparently been operating by herself for a year), but if not for the blurb, I'd have little idea as to what was going on. That isn't good or bad in of itself (certainly a story doesn't have to lay all of its cards on the table from the outset), but still, it's noticable.
Admittedly, anytime Tsu'tey turns up in the presence of a female, I have to roll my eyes, but meh. Not a big shipper. I have no idea why so many are apparently infatuated with him.
Anyway, it's a decent start.
9/2/2020 c1 1RiceBelly
I’m so excited for this! Girl let me tell you, I am already in love with this, I can’t wait for the next update
I’m so excited for this! Girl let me tell you, I am already in love with this, I can’t wait for the next update
8/23/2020 c1 Zaya
Wow nice plot man, i loved the summary, keep updating I would love to read the next chapter,
Wow nice plot man, i loved the summary, keep updating I would love to read the next chapter,