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10/1/2020 c1 1Malkin Nott
I had cried twice and had butterflies halfway through until the end! I love how they were still the best of friends here. And the extra weapons training AND tournament matches were both a delight to read.

I was wondering about Yuki... and they were both well written. Their romance and interaction was great. Especially with Nealann’s irony. I did wonder if she would have a close relationship with her cousin as well, and if Domitan became ... someone else but you didn’t delve into that. You created a bond between her and her brothers that made it very believable for me to accept her decision to become a knight upon their deaths.

I am actually amazed by the swordsmanship and wish this was a multi-chapter story wherein their training and possible jaunt into Scanra were explored. For example, did Joren had the lances weighted for Kel but not for Nealann? Since Joren still pulled the awful trick with Lalasa.

Does Nealann ever come close to beating Yuki in swords-only duel? I truly reread that entire passage; especially when the magic just came out. I like how their magics are basically Christmas colors. Haha.

I dreaded and loved her Ordeal. That’s the second time I cried when I read this. It was simply touching. I am glad the Elemental didn’t bully her too much. And actually tempted her.

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