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1/4 c10 James Birdsong
Good three chapters of course
12/17/2020 c10 large-rock
It's too painful
12/17/2020 c10 3freshlybakedspiderbread
I'm perhaps early in commenting this, as I'll probably have less to say by the time the story is finished, but these tales of following Mokou meeting another being who has been affected by the vast passages of time, and how much (or how little) it helps her to put in retrospect how it has affected herself, has been immensely intriguing and also mesmerising! I'm sure part of it has to do with my own often melancholic and at times existential thoughts that spring up now and again, but I think it's super cool and neat how this story has switched between or blended together feelings of both dread and also comfort.

I like how the Myouren crew are simply continuing about their business much like any other living being in the face of passing time. There are losses and changes and other such things, but you simply face them and move on. Yukari's section on the other hand, is appropriately unnerving, but there's somehow something comforting to know that her eldritch self will always be confident in her place in the universe!?

This chapter right here though is very much all about an inevitable passing, and aaaaagh I'm sad! I really do feel like I'm saying goodbye to Reisen, whom I've known basically forever. Yet at the same time, I'm of course still curious as to what this means for our immortals, where 'passing' is impossible. Really happy to have been following it and am excited to see it continue!
12/15/2020 c8 large-rock
Every chapter is another farewell. Ahhhh.
It looks as if, in time, Mokou will have to meet with Kaguya again.
I wonder how many chapters remain.
11/22/2020 c7 freshlybakedspiderbread
I would pray to Mokou...! And I really like Eiki here, naturally still at her usual element and also looking out for Mokou in her own way.
11/21/2020 c7 James Birdsong
Good two chapters
11/21/2020 c7 large-rock
Just kind of sad thinking about how this settlement rose and fell so quickly that their worship hardly registered to Mokou. At least Eiki is still around.
10/8/2020 c5 Mokku
This is, perhaps, my favourite kind of story. A lot of people struggle to get into the disjointed tales from a world they'll never see, but this melancholic way of describing the passage of time is, and always has been, rather beautiful to me. The inclusion of subtle details such as the state of Gensokyo (or what was once Gensokyo) and how the world has changed as time passes is supremely well done.
I would love to hear what other stories you have to tell, and the beautifully woven words with which to tell them.
9/26/2020 c5 James Birdsong
Groovy
9/8/2020 c5 large-rock
It makes me so sad. I love the little details of how the city where people live has changed, I love the changing of the Miare's names, the changing of the languages Mokou learned and didn't learn. There are still forests. There are still trees. The single red-touched maple leaf that falls with Akyuu's words of finality falls much like the innumerable leaves that came before. Somewhere out in the great world beyond, Shizuha Aki is smiling. Akyuu died once, a long time ago, and I thought I could not be more mournful. Now she has one final death ahead of her, and I wish to cry once more.

This bond between Mokou and Akyuu, this one that only formed thousands of years after our present, after our canon, is indescribable. The care for her little friend, their silence-filled conversation, the feeling of dread when she realizes that the Miare will not be eternal, the imperfect sympathy between the girl who could not forget and the girl who could not die. And at last, the awe and respect for the words of a girl she will soon never see again.

A mayfly's lifetime. That is a lovely phrase.
9/8/2020 c5 freshlybakedspiderbread
I was going to make a quip about how Akyuu will eventually have to learn to write before learning to walk! But then she says that this is the end... No, but that aside, I really like this strange yet just familiar-enough-future you described, that does just enough to once again set in how much of a stranger Mokou must feel to the rest of the word.

I'm running through my mind the various immortal characters, or at least ones characterised by being long-lived, and I'm excited and also nervous about the thought of Mokou having to say a final goodbye to any of them...

Also not me looking away from that final line because I tell myself that a lot.
9/3/2020 c4 freshlybakedspiderbread
Yuyuko's such a good friend, but, and this is perhaps just me making wild interpretations, I get the sense that everything about her and the surroundings of Hakugyokurou must provide a surreal and scary sort of reminder to Mokou, about her transient and eternal nature. Everything's so pretty because it's 'still' to the point of feeling false.

I wonder if there was some mix of both relief and sadness to see it having moved elsewhere at the end there!
8/31/2020 c3 large-rock
It's only been 3 chapters and a handful of words, but I feel so melancholy. The amount of reflection in every thought and action is already bringing me low. I can't wait for more.
8/31/2020 c3 freshlybakedspiderbread
This already has me gripped. The way you write Mokou's thoughts, the details from others that she chooses to notice, it's like I can -feel- just how old and ancient she is, yet she doesn't feel like she's 'tired' of life, but more like she's become inured to it. Chapter 2's dream sequence felt almost like dreams I've had before, and I'd say surreal in a suffocating way (which is good).

What will Mokou do next? She probably at least has a long time to figure out...

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