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10/9 c3 2North021884
Liked this a lot, once again, excellent writing, not to mention exactly correct verbatims of the dialogue from the show, which is a lot of work, I know!

My favorite part was the very last paragraph. "Patience wasn't a strong virtue of mine" is so accurate for Beth (should it be in present tense tho?) Also loved that you call out that, at the end of the day, she was more bothered by Mick not trusting her than by the realization that vampires really exist.

Thanks for the great writing on one of my favorite shows ever, which I just recently started re-watching.

Stay well,

North
10/9 c2 North021884
I like how you closed out this scene. It always bothered me that it just stopped. I wanted to know - did Beth bolt? Did she quiz this obviously seriously hurt person? I especially liked the paragraph about the emotions she was feeling & that last line "That's still a possibility once I work out which emotion is more dominant." LOL

I also really liked the sentence about not knowing how to help him & not being sure she wanted to get much closer "right now". Rings true.

Thank you for the writing!

North
10/9 c1 North021884
Love the internal dialogue point-of-view. I've been a fan of that since I started reading Stephen King many years ago, as he's a master at that. Well-done & an enjoyable quick read.

One small suggestion: it's a bit of a pain to do, but if you were to italicize the internal dialogue, it makes it easier to separate from the spoken word & sets it up separately. Just a thought.

I recently started re-watching Moonlight when it popped up in my Apple TV feed and feel in love with it all over again. That got me digging out the full-length novel I'd written with a writing group years ago, which led me back here. I'm enjoying how much more sophisticated the writing is now than when I used to come here 'back in the day', as Josef would say, LOL. This has all inspired me to re-edit our story & post the full chapters here, which we didn't do back when we wrote it, as we had also embedded music & video that this site can't accommodate. I'm stripping all that out to re-post under Moonlight: The Next Chapter.

I love the Moonlight world, thanks for helping to remind me of that!

Stay well,

North

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